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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
Embrace me with your angel wings Ease this searing pain Show me the beauty of innocense for I have lost my own Let me feel your love You are the being of its purest form Remind me why I keep struggling If only for a moment then I shall contiue on I hope this is good, even if not very dark. This is the only poem I have posted straight up here without putting it on paper and revising it a few times. [This message has been edited by danni (edited 01-08-2000).] |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Ah, the tug.... We all feel the tug Danni... Nice work |
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a-alibaster Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392 |
ahhhh.....how many times I have not wished for the same thing.....beautiful...the words you have expressed! There is an alter ego which dwells in every soul... a-alibaster |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
Thabk you both. Your comments are greatly appreciated. |
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lostboy Member
since 1999-11-21
Posts 275New Hampshire, USA |
Needs no revising dan. we keep struggling cuz we believe it's "got" to get better from here. This is really different from you, I really like it a lot! |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
Well, thank you lostboy. Curious though, what makes it so different than the usual? |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
danni  I adore the deep soul searing love you express so well in your poetry. You did wonderfully expressing yourself. For not putting pencil to paper! Straight on board so to speak LOLI have yet to do that myself. I applaud your freedom to fly  Words bloom like flowers that seem astonished at being born. L. Pirandello 16th Century Dramatist |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
And flying you are Danni! Sometimes beauties like this come with no effort or revision or scratchings.. Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely. ~Isis~ (Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
Jenny- thank you so very much. As said before I am an equal fan of your poems. It is an honor to know you enjoy mine so. Isis- thank you also. It felt great to be able to just let it flow. Usually it takes alot of work before I post them here. |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
danni I like the fact that you did not write it down first. What comes to mind comes to mind . I can feel this piece in all its innocents!!!!! |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
danni I like the fact that you did not write it down first. What comes to mind, comes to mind . I can feel this piece in all its innocents! |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
Thanks Bo- glad to know I was able to make you feel it. Let's me know the piece has done what was intended. thanks again. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Pristine work, Danni. Pulls emotion and longing from the reader. 'tis good, indeed. Michael |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
This was beautiful danni...I mean I loved it from the first line to the last. I feel this way too....and believe me..it is always worth the struggle. This is wonderful danni...keep it up! (I'm sure you will) [This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (edited 01-11-2000).] |
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FreeByrd Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 267 |
I know too well how wonderful it feels to be embraced with this feeling of peace. A moment of sanity. Well Done danni. |
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