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Holden
Junior Member

since 1999-12-23

Posts 26
Brighton East, Victoria, Australia

0 posted 1999-12-26 04:50 AM

Hi.
It's me,
Remember me?
You don't know me.
Do you?  Can you see me?
You can't.  I'm invisible.
Or am I?  You used to know me.
We used to be friends, remember that?
You can't see me, you can't even hear me.
I scream & I scream yet you don't hear.
I push & shove yet you don't feel.
Alone, so I disappear...
Emptiness inside me.
I'm Invisible.
I'm No longer,
I'm gone,
Bye.

'I once picked a daisy's petals searching for an answer. I went through 10 daisy's before getting the answer I was looking for...I love you.'

starboards
Member

since 1999-10-14

Posts 467
longwood, florida

1 posted 1999-12-26 09:28 AM

This one is gonna make me cry...sometimes i think i'm invisible too...

Starboards

"When a love affair ends it may take a while to see what's grown in it's stead, but usually it is you!"

~Red~
Junior Member

since 1999-11-02

Posts 36
chicago, Ill-na, u.s.a.

2 posted 1999-12-26 02:06 PM

me too...not a fun feeling at tallz...yet i like the poem very much so..keep writing!

~Why is it that you beleive in perfection my friend? For perfection is a dream, it shall never be acheived. So tell me why you beleive in perfection?....For PErfection doesn't exist..~

Holden
Junior Member

since 1999-12-23

Posts 26
Brighton East, Victoria, Australia

3 posted 1999-12-26 08:29 PM

Thank you Starboards & ~Red~. I wrote this without preparing or anything. I was just in the forum and I typed it up. It was sort of an experiment, different than most poems I write. I'm glad you two enjoyed it. Thanks for the comments.

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

4 posted 1999-12-26 10:44 PM

I am a new member, and yours was the first poem I read, and I must say I was very impressed. You have an excellent free verse
writing style. I relate to this poem very much so, it's like you read my mind. I look forward to more poetry of yours.

* Melissa Honeybee *

JOY 14
Senior Member

since 1999-09-22

Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA

5 posted 1999-12-27 08:40 PM

Holden,

This poem reminds me of someone. Oh wait, it's me. Too often I feel invisable also.
This gives me inspiration to write a poem of my own!

JOY

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