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Perfect Tide
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Perfect Tide |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
~*~ Restless stir of waters welling As remembered through my veins In a half caught breeze I swallowed Ever all of this remains A stolen glance remitted Comes forth in frilly wave Had caught off guard so vibrant And bathed the shores concave And swept away in tickle That gently soaked your cuffs What has kept us at a distance Gathered up in foamy roughs Yet kept returning eager This sculpt of friendly fringe As I am such a dreamer These surfs so nearly singe While somehow in a respite That took you far from view Beneath the rippled vestment Breathless morns complacent cue That calls me to the shoreline By eternal touch and feel There continues to be dancing To the waves these depths conceal And on the surface gleaming Slips my palms in cool delight Albeit mindless seeming The articulate of slight In these tides of truth so telling Through me now as just before Is your vision so compelling That I dream and thirst the shore Copyright Kkh 4/16/04 |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
absolutely beautiful! |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
I agree, beautiful! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
KathleenKathleen~ You *gift* us with such beautiful poetic thoughts~ 'Yet kept returning eager This sculpt of friendly fringe As I am such a dreamer These surfs so nearly singe' 'sculpt of friendly fringe' ... too, too cool~ *Huglets*:hug: ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Kathleen this is a marvelous write! Very much enjoyed. hugs, Chris Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale. |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
I do agree with all the above. Beautiful poem. JL  |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
absolutely breathtaking, i loved your last lines  |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
In these tides of truth so telling Through me now as just before Is your vision so compelling That I dream and thirst the shore So smooth... so pretty Sade |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Wonderful - just loved your opening stanza! jwesley |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you can write about anything! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
TD - This was a phenominal piece of writing! Really loved it!  ...jo |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
That calls me to the shoreline By eternal touch and feel There continues to be dancing To the waves these depths conceal You stir so many emotions, so very beautifully Kathleen~ |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
 "So what befalls the flawless? |
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forne_marin Member
since 2004-04-13
Posts 140Spartanburg, South Carolina |
I love rhythm. Rhythm is what makes poetry poetry. It is what makes free verse poetry. Of all the elements that define "poetry", I love rhythm. Your poem has rhythm. It has lots of rhythm... it has a GREAT rhythm. I like it. I like it a LOT. Did I mention I like rhythm? But the most wonderful thing about Tiggers is I'm the only one! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
smiling at the responses and adding mine..a beautiful well thought out poem, TD...and I loved that last line. *s M |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Every line of this is wonderful, but my favorite stanza is the 4th one. *BRAVO* Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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