Open Poetry #32 |
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Chasing Dragons On A Restaurant Tablecloth |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows ![]() |
There is a saying in the East that if you go seeking treasure, and dig too deep, you will awaken the monsters whose intent it is to keep the prize within their grasp, and if you clasp the riches to your bosom you must accept the monsters in your heart. You bring old memories in your bag of forgotten times, disjointed memories, the left behind abandoned crimes of passion, or of greed, disconnected from the past by selective blessings of amnesia. While your eyes implore, do I have the threads to make sense of the past we lived in a time when there was no going home, and the lines of right and wrong became too blurred along the way; I could fill in the blanks while this candle dimly glows but who beside you is alive to give me thanks and whose conscience is to say we deserve to have survived the lives we chose? Maybe you are right, maybe it would help you to pray, but for me deciding it's god's will that I live every day in pain is like talking to the wind when it only wants to blow away, it is like seeking dry shelter by dancing in the rain. ©2004 by icebox |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Excellent poem. Should be further examined. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you make me want to cry sometimes |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
but who beside you is alive to give me thanks and whose conscience is to say we deserve to have survived the lives we chose? as passing shadow articulated, cry and then some...this was amazing...thank you from my heart. |
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Bonnie j Senior Member
since 2003-06-27
Posts 1588Ohio |
The title caught my eye on this one. So many lines that give imagination a wonderful ride. Liked very much. Bon-Bon ![]() |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Maybe you are right, maybe it would help you to pray, but for me deciding it's god's will that I live every day in pain is like talking to the wind when it only wants to blow away, it is like seeking dry shelter by dancing in the rain. exactly. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
icebox I could fill in the blanks while this candle dimly glows Not everyone can give the gift of memory. I feel the struggle of this encounter in your words. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"There is a saying in the East that if you go seeking treasure, and dig too deep, you will awaken the monsters whose intent it is to keep the prize within their grasp, and if you clasp the riches to your bosom you must accept the monsters in your heart." But you do know that the only way to be rid of demons, is not through the slaughter of them, but through their transformation by way of love. Oh. Well, I'm singing to the choir again, ain't I? ![]() This is wonderful Icebox...as are you. ![]() |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
IceBox~ Though I love the all of this ... these lines stand out in my mind~ 'You bring old memories in your bag of forgotten times' Wonderfully done~ *Huglets* ![]() ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Wonderfully said... Loved the last stanza. Seems like I am always caught out in the rain. (My Chinese sign is a dragon). "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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CastleGuard Senior Member
since 2003-04-30
Posts 760Alberta, Canada |
Yes, well done. The last two lines are exceptional in their closing. CG |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
"Like seeking dry shelter .... by dancing in the rain." My, what a wondrous thought. Thank you for sharing this fine poem. Bob |
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