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Hero in a Paper Crown
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Hero in a Paper Crown |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving 
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He played a hero in a paper crown and striped pyjama bottoms. An old library bag slung carelessly across his chest to carry the countless bounties of costume jewlery and hairpins ~the glittery kind that twinkled~ to pay off the dragon teddy that held me to ransom. I was his maiden fair In terry towel dressing gown and holiday garland adorning my worried brow. "Save me prince of pirates, King of fairies, superhero superstar" I would feign in cry, And bounding he came to slay the menance of plastic soldiers and dolls whose heads went missing in previous battles. And in pretend he untied my hands and placed a kiss on my cheek to break the spell the witches surely had cast because thats the way all good fairy tales are told. Though i knew my little prince prefered kissing frogs to girls, he never grimaced when adorning me with his love and toothless smiles. And like all the "happily ever afters" go He promised me that when he grew up he'd marry me... thats if daddy says it's okay. Some days i pray for Peter Pan to take him off to Neverland so his little soul wont age a day. ~But I know my hero can't save me from time~ So every second he grows will be mine to keep secretly hiding in hankerchiefs. ~ ~ ~  [This message has been edited by muted (04-22-2004 03:14 PM).] |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Wow! Beyond beautiful. This piece speaks of such love and such tenderness. Wow! Have I said that? Well, Wow again! Susan |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Truly, a precious write! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
 Oh Dawn..this is SO precious! Children do keep us young... But, may the child inside you live on forever. Thank you for this keeper! Remember..'second star on the right' ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ To have lived the dream of a love so true... |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
OH its Tinkerbell!!! LOL sweet sweet  Peter Pan is so magical, makes me cry everytime i watch any version of it...now if only i go and read the book..hmmm  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Very touching write, Dawn. I enjoyed this immensely. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
I added his little photo because he has been begging me to put one on the site...I told him he had alot of reading to do before he was allowed to have a member photo.. 50 poems seems like alot of reading to a kid! LOL |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Ah...the face of an angel produced by an angel.. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Dawn this is absolutely beautiful, smiling so much here with a tear. What a handsome boy you have Maree Have you any dreams you'd like to sell? |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Your last stanza: “So every second he grows will be mine to keep secretly hiding in hankerchiefs.” Yep, this is certainly a WOW! JL |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Dawn, he is as handsome as his mom is beautiful... loved it  M |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
What a delight to read, savor and serve warm. TD |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Muted, I adored this wonderful poem -- I have a son, too, and know these feelings so well. Mine is grown/growing too fast, the little boy is nearly gone. |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
OMG Dawn~ he looks just like you....precious this, precious him! what a gift you bring....and share....  ~~**~~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is precious! he is adorable! |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
thank you everybody....look at his chubby cheeks...could pinch them? LOL |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
muted, This is one of my favorites of yours; such warmth, play, and joy. Sadie |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
wonderfully precious... Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
I loved this. It made me happy Juju |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Dawn~ This one sticks to me like glue ... and I'm better for the joy~ Awwwwwwwwww, he is SO PRECIOUS~ Gently *kiss* one cheek for me~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
you tell stories very well... I didn't even notice that it was well written because it is so well written... that's the mark isn't it? wish I was 5 again...with a red towel I'd be superman |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
thank you everybody  Marge, I'll make sure he gets that kiss on the cheek  here is one for you!!Mr.Rebel: I bet you would have made a terrific superman ...but alot of us here think you are pretty darned "super" anyway, even without the red towel! |
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MovesInSilence Member
since 2004-03-21
Posts 111Perth, Australia |
Kewl buddy, somehow i could see you as a child playing the games, waiting to be rescued ... now the part of the hero is played by your own child ... ok so i liked it ... |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
this is so unbelievably sweet! I just loved it! The imagery was amazing and the message just made my heart do that little double pump how sweet thing. Beautiful wirte! ~Live and Laugh~ The nice thing about being a pesimest is that your either right, or pleasantly surprised. |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
"And like all the "happily ever afters" go He promised me that when he grew up he'd marry me... thats if daddy says it's okay. ~ I remember something like this myself... this gave me a chuckle this morning. Enjoyed! |
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Endlessecho Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 398I live within myself |
Oh my goodness! This was beyond heart touching. (And he is adorable). The love in your family shown through this peice! Brought tears to the eyes. Thank you for such a light-hearted but deeply felt poem. I loved it! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Good Lord, this is the sweetest most touching write! And he is soooooooooo cute! "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Bonnie j Senior Member
since 2003-06-27
Posts 1588Ohio |
Precious moments that we never forget. One I have, after all these years, are his first steps and his twinkling blue eyes smiling in laughter. Love Bon-Bon  |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
ah this is beautiful, am glad I didn't miss it...my little one asked grandpa when he would be able to marry grandma...rofl...they are precious...how would we make it through this world without their smiles? |
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