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Reflections on Grief - IV
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Reflections on Grief - IV |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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Unwelcome Artiste Grief is a manipulator It sculpts the features Of helpless faces Lips up, then down They smile or frown Inappropriately, without volition Conducting a dirge Of destiny no longer our own The choirmaster is tireless As verse after verse The requiem continues Lives dangle from strings Lacking all purpose Mere marionettes Who’ve long forgotten What mercy feels like In painter’s smock Grief chooses a palette That lacks yellow There are no lavenders Pinks or red Only shades of bleak The tapestry it weaves Of broken threads And unraveled edges Has no resemblance To the one we’d planned It directs a dream That erases smiles And introduces screams The theatre’s exit signs Are all unlighted It choreographs a dance Of exhausted maneuvers Around shards of broken heart |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I really love this series please do continue on writing and I will be here nodding |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Astounding -- this series was already among the best poetry PIP has seen...that you are able to continue it without losing any of the intensity or creative drive is just...well, astounding. Hats-off to you, Laura -- and toss 'em in the air! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"It directs a dream That erases smiles And introduces screams The theatre’s exit signs Are all unlighted It choreographs a dance Of exhausted maneuvers Around shards of broken heart" Yes, you have captured it well. Very well said indeed. Hugs~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Amazing!! |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
this is the first I've read of your series - such a hard part of life |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You have woven a tapestry of grief and sadness ~ brilliantly! VERY well written, Dear Belle of the South, North, East and West! I sense these poems on grief come from your very deep knowing through personal experience... Comforting embrace, EA |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
There's no such thing as "Good Grief" is there gal?....Fine, fine write gal... |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wow...!! Eric |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
PS: I'm not sure the 6th is the last... I don't seem to have much choice in the matter. LOL Thank you! *S* Ratleader: Thank you, my friend... you are too kind... but I sure hope you don't stop. *S* Enchantress: Thank you so much! *S* Martie: Thank you! *S* Copperbell: It is that... I thank you so much! *S* EA: They turn me inside out... if that's any indication. *S* Thank you, my friend... for the comments and the comfort. *S* Toerag: Only in Charlie Brown cartoons! *S* Thank you, my friend... so very much! *S* Ericc: Thank you! *S* |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"In painter’s smock Grief chooses a palette That lacks yellow There are no lavenders Pinks or red Only shades of bleak" suthern -- you say it sooooo well.  .....jo |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
In painter’s smock Grief chooses a palette That lacks yellow There are no lavenders Pinks or red Only shades of bleak The tapestry it weaves Of broken threads And unraveled edges Has no resemblance To the one we’d planned It directs a dream That erases smiles And introduces screams The theatre’s exit signs Are all unlighted It choreographs a dance Of exhausted maneuvers Around shards of broken heart ============================= well you sure worked this one to a T... totally captured your theme with your extended metaphors and personifications. Cleverly written.... just wish it didnt all have to be flet to give us such wisdom. going on to see the next one.... the moth will be back.  |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hi, so sorry you are in the midst of this pain. So very well written here, this terrible feeling. Hugs Sandra |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
iliana, JM & catalina moon: Thank you so very much, kind ladies... I appreciate your comments very much! *S* |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Suthern beloved one, I can’t begin to express the wonder that is you, its rare in this world to find someone whose talent is matched by ability of extraordinary quality. That you possess both in abundance is clear even to the simple minded, that you then fail to trumpet your gift is incredible. You are modest in the extreme, and you have such an outstanding gift to write simply amazes me. I cannot say often enough beloved one that your writing is exceptionally good, this series is utterly, utterly, amazing. Your ability to write such emotion is unmatched, that you continue to grace these pages with your gift is something that leaves me awed. YOU are a writer and I am blessed to call you my beloved sister of soul  Love you always And forever Mushy  Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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