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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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tonight I lie still without churning within the ceiling’s parallel plane is lowered to a reach out and touch distance the walls loom inward until movement is just next to restrictive the back of my throat is too near the front; my lungs have economized inside this permeation of dark my heart’s beating favors the proximity of my eardrums this world’s trespasses have abbreviated survival’s requisite distance with the exception of sleep and You |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
this world’s trespasses have abbreviated survival’s requisite distance with the exception of sleep and You Those very things you need near are too often the ones most distant... This is magnificent, my friend... though I would cry that joy seems to have made a permanent move from the neighborhood. *S* |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
tonight I lie still without churning within ~*~ You do realize what I like best about your tenacity? Is that you don't let go. That effort, alone, is a lifeline, to all who care. Thank you, JB, for showing me grace with or without compromise. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"this world’s trespasses have abbreviated survival’s requisite distance with the exception of sleep and You" Wow, these lines struck me hard....great lines!  ....jo |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
thank you ladies...your comments ease the transition of a very rough monday morning...sigh... that you see grace...sigh...what can I say, I did not feel very graceful this weekend..... suthern, it seems there are times that tears could not run dry, but when they do...and one's eyes cannot cry...well you know what I mean...its then that friends are most important *s* |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I can say I understand on a certain level of my own my heart is with you |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"this world’s trespasses have abbreviated survival’s requisite distance with the exception of sleep and You" Woohoo! This was excellent! "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
 ~*Me ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
I like the way you worded this. |
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