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iliana
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0 posted 2004-06-25 03:09 AM

Mesmerized,
     the lilies, as they gazed upon you fair.
Agonized,
     the clouds sighed, letting little tears.
Scrutinized,
     your words, fell softly on deaf ears.
Realized,
     those words, after many years.

Lilies hold their secrets’ sum,
     and watch the clouds roll by.
They see the truth of blooming love
And soak up all the sighs.

I should have known then.
The rain was showing so.
I should have known then
     to never let you go.

Oh, to be alike a lily
     grow silent under sky
     to grow and show my color
     and see it in your eyes.

But I was entranced with the speed of youth
     and immortality,
     invulnerable, invincible, unaware of need.
While
     mesmerized,
     those lilies, they gazed upon you fair.
They found themselves within your eyes
     and loved that you were there.

Snow

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desert flower looking for rain

1 posted 2004-06-25 03:18 AM

i want to tell myself that loving this piece has nothing to do with the fact that lilies are my absolute favorite flower .... i don't need to say it too loudly though, because it's true.. it's not the reason. but damn, if you did not do such a wonderful job. and... to make me forget that it was in rhyme is truly something!

i hope this ramble made sense! :-D ~snow

"yet each man kills the thing he loves
by each let this be heard,
some do it with a bitter look,
some with a flattering word"
oscar wilde

iliana
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2 posted 2004-06-25 03:23 AM

Snow, you are a sweetie to say such nice things about the poem. I love lilies, too, especially the fragrant ones. Thanks for posting.

...jo

muted

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3 posted 2004-06-25 04:09 AM

this IS deeply touching...
and of all the things those lilies encompass...

passing shadows
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4 posted 2004-06-25 04:15 AM

it seems that rain is in quite a few people's forecasts

nice job with this write here jo

Sudhir Iyer
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5 posted 2004-06-25 08:22 AM

a fine write, this one

regards
sudhir

Susan Caldwell
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6 posted 2004-06-25 08:26 AM

"But I was entranced with the speed of youth
     and immortality,
     invulnerable, invincible, unaware of need.
While
     mesmerized,
     those lilies, they gazed upon you fair.
They found themselves within your eyes
     and loved that you were there."

Jo~ This is without a doubt my favorite of yours...I loved the format, the rhyme, and the words as intertwined....
(I love Lilies as well...)
You out did yourself with this one and I am saving it!

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

7 posted 2004-06-25 08:31 AM

Jo...this is a keeper...a piece to treasure and read over and over.
Awesome write...just awesome!!!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that.
Something from the sea, whichever one I'm near.
When I stray too far from beachland, it calls me back

LeeJ
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8 posted 2004-06-25 08:32 AM

But I was entranced with the speed of youth
     and immortality,
     invulnerable, invincible, unaware of need.
While
     mesmerized,
     those lilies, they gazed upon you fair.
They found themselves within your eyes
     and loved that you were there.

Incredibly beautiful...flowers are to me, one of nature's most beautiful reinments....as are your words here...simply lovely...thank you for sharing.

PKreturns
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9 posted 2004-06-25 09:28 AM

Every line in this is absolutely poetic and inspiring.

Earth Angel
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10 posted 2004-06-25 09:57 AM

iliana ~

I know that you are an angel, but I have now come to realize that you are an angel lily!

Lovely Iliana the Angel Lily!

Muchas smoochas,
EA

Seymour Tabin
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11 posted 2004-06-25 10:02 AM

iliana
A lovely, lovely write.

Professor Gloom
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12 posted 2004-06-25 10:24 AM

It’s always in the eyes
Enjoyed

Gloom

Susan
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13 posted 2004-06-25 10:46 AM

jo, oh my, this is beyond good. This is incredible. I have not the words to express how much I like this piece. Guess "WOW" will have to suffice.

Hugs -- Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

suthern

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14 posted 2004-06-25 01:40 PM

Yowsers... this is superb! *S* I could easily get lost in your words... the rhyme is as graceful as petals. *S*

Mysteria

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15 posted 2004-06-25 01:45 PM

Now it is not often I want a poem to go on and on, but I did this one. I felt like it was the prologue to the start of a book of floral poetry. Could be? Iliana's Garden has a nice ring to it?

ThisDiamond
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16 posted 2004-06-25 07:54 PM

Such fragile beauty and regenerative power in this write. You did a glorious job with this.
TD

Goodknight
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17 posted 2004-06-25 07:59 PM

Jo - this is just terrific - no it is wonderful - yes all that and sweetly painted on my soul - loved it - Paul

GG
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18 posted 2004-06-25 10:34 PM

Jo, this is perfect. Definitely one of my favorites of yours. I love the rhythm, the images, the message, I love it all.
A feeling of loss, though... and I hope things are okay for you.

Always, Alyssa

Poems are made by fools like me,
But only God can make a tree.
Joyce kilmer

miscellanea
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19 posted 2004-06-26 12:31 PM

iliana,
This has such graceful words and rhythm; I feel like I could touch the lily and feel the cloud sighing tears! Beautiful!
miscellanea

iliana
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20 posted 2004-06-26 01:17 AM

Poets all, I sure am glad you are all here and really appreciate your thoughtful remarks on the poem.

PS to GG: I am fine, sweet one. This was mostly musing (with memories of feelings added but maybe not in the same way they happened....if that makes any sense.) Thanks, though for your concern. Really, I'm fine...but that other situation regarding my friend, I appreciate your prayers.

Sunshine

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21 posted 2004-06-26 03:23 PM

Jo, this is touched
with the essence of "classic".
Truly, a keeper...

*click*ing the library button.

SEA

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with you

22 posted 2004-06-26 03:42 PM

"I should have known then.
The rain was showing so.
I should have known then
to never let you go"

WOW!
I absolutely LOVE this!
the flow is incredible....and so soft...

inkedgoddess
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23 posted 2004-06-26 07:12 PM

to show my color through your eyes...
simply lovely poetry here

Suetang
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24 posted 2004-06-26 07:15 PM

Wow, Jo!

This was absolutely stunning and so very much enjoyed.

Take care........Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

SimplyGold
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25 posted 2004-06-26 11:29 PM

iliana,

I dido everything that has been said before me. I love this poem. It is a remarkable piece of writing.

SG

Kethry
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26 posted 2004-06-26 11:45 PM

Stunning write both in format and content.

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

EvocativeVerse2
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27 posted 2004-06-27 04:31 PM

Hee hee! Love this one too! Obviously I have not been looking hard enough for great poetry lately...but now that I know you can darn well bet I will be stopping by a little more often. Bravo iliana.

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

vandana

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28 posted 2004-06-27 04:41 PM

nice read

Susan
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29 posted 2004-06-29 08:59 PM

Had to come back and visit again, even though I've a copy in the library. Again I sigh --

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

iliana
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30 posted 2004-06-30 12:40 PM

Everbody -- I am so very please you all liked this one. It's one of my favorites, too. I wish the muse that teased out this one would come back for a visit...hehehe. Thanks for all your thoughtful posts!

Susan, I am thrilled you liked it that much!

miscellanea
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31 posted 2004-07-03 10:47 AM

enjoyed very much!
miscellanea

Magnus

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32 posted 2004-07-03 11:20 AM

Jo, this is exceptional. Such touching and
valued words...Words that convey such feel
and emotion.

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