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A revenant ghost.....
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A revenant ghost..... |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA 
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There is one stepping stone missing a setback among shamelessly bitter afterthoughts that wish I had considered them first I am wishing into kept water perhaps half listening to the voices go home, go home why fall amidst the moss and green.... But do they know how my jealousy unravels a sly cotton unpicking every artificial stitch of acceptance I feel no easy flourish of blooming words to speak when what they have was taken so soon from me... and tremble-tumble do breaths when chasing the coat tails of something old and surely dead. and it is here where apparition leaves me colder fumbling for footing pouring clouds of heavy breath in subdued light on the last inch before an absent stone. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
ah.. perhaps the pavers end.. the journey does not.. as usual.. I'm very impressed.. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I am wishing into kept water perhaps half listening to the voices go home, go home why fall amidst the moss and green.... But do they know how my jealousy unravels a sly cotton unpicking every artificial stitch of acceptance I feel no easy flourish of blooming words to speak when what they have was taken so soon from me... ============================== hauntingly beautiful gem.... found my self holding my breath as your words spill down the page. You keep spillin em...I'll keep reading em.   |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Yes..haunting yet beautiful...amazing you. Hugs~ Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"But do they know how my jealousy unravels a sly cotton unpicking every artificial stitch of acceptance" You certainly weave an intricate stich through your poetry, dear gempop! I also liked the lines about "kept water" -- brilliant!  .....jo |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
This is simply brilliant writing. I have to say the most talented write I have seen. It is simpy dripping with talent. Intelligent, well-constructed, engaging poem. Well done. Kevin |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
how easily your words flow... enjoyed reading this... regards sudhir |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Breath taking Gemma! What you write has such depth and knowledge. Ron said he was impressed. *nods* yep.. and amazed at your talent. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Gemmy, you amaze me...your writing is so powerfully felt by the reader, holding one's attention through every single word, right to the end. Brilliant star you are! Morning, happy Friday and have a wonderful weekend. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
But do they know how my jealousy unravels a sly cotton unpicking every artificial stitch of acceptance Oh this speaks to me. it's a keeper Mxx The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
But do they know how my jealousy unravels a sly cotton unpicking every artificial stitch of acceptance The entire poem is excellent... but these lines are simply outstanding!!! |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wow....!!!! Eric |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
How do you do that???   LL |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Masterful Writing! |
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