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gemjop
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since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

0 posted 2004-06-24 11:12 AM


I have sought comfort
for hours...

but the night is at war
with temperamental godess
hailing angry tears
screaming winds
that would be of red rage

if only I dare
look past the curtained pane.

Thinking I hear her
spit my name across
the sky

letting me know
just who she is at war with


I am lifeless against
her pestering whispers
that peirce glass
to offer gentler threats

hissing before my bed.

Warmed sheets
by my fellow pulsing veins

sweat out
what should be so cold...

There is no open window
and yet

there are her clouds
rising~heaving
against lung cavity
walls
that are not meant to hold
forever

we all want to know
what it feels like to die


to be scattered in one breath
over a glittering sea
of starlight reflections

and so she rages

awakening hearts

to
beat
a
little
faster

to dream awake

of nothing else.



© Copyright 2004 gj - All Rights Reserved
Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
1 posted 2004-06-24 11:17 AM


"we all want to know
what it feels like to die

to be scattered in one breath
over a glittering sea
of starlight reflections"

~ I think I'll put my order in now for my demise to be as such!

Gemdrops keep falling from this blue sky ~ and I love them all!

Huggums,
LL

Cpat Hair
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Posts 11793

2 posted 2004-06-24 11:45 AM


but the night is at war
with temperamental godess
hailing angry tears
screaming winds
that would be of red rage

if only I dare
look past the curtained pane.

Thinking I hear her
spit my name across
the sky

letting me know
just who she is at war with

my favorite lines.... but as always.. the whole is wonderful..

enjoyed..

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

3 posted 2004-06-24 11:50 AM


gemmy, your writing is incredible...thank you for sharing.  Very much enjoyed.
Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989

4 posted 2004-06-24 12:13 PM


but the night is at war
with temperamental godess
hailing angry tears
screaming winds
that would be of red rage

if only I dare
look past the curtained pane.

Thinking I hear her
spit my name across
the sky

letting me know
just who she is at war with

Gemma! wow, such incredible and powerful write you have written.  EXCELLENT

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
5 posted 2004-06-24 12:25 PM


Fabulous write Gemma....
You are a very talented writer...
I always enjoy reading your words.
Hugs~

Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that.
Something from the sea, whichever one I'm near.
When I stray too far from beachland, it calls me back

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
6 posted 2004-06-24 01:08 PM


"Thinking I hear her
spit my name across
the sky"


Loved those lines, Gemma, but the entire thing was so graphic...I am never disappointed when I read you!

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
7 posted 2004-06-24 01:08 PM


*heavy sigh*
Ericc
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since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178

8 posted 2004-06-24 04:04 PM


Masterfuly done.

Eric

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350
the ass-end of space
9 posted 2004-06-25 02:29 AM


this made me want to curl into a ball in the corner..then i realized i was already there
Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

10 posted 2004-06-27 11:27 PM


A wowser Gem!

Keeping it.

Maree.

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

iliana
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since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
11 posted 2004-06-28 12:46 PM


Gempop -- I think all the above comments say everything I could, but I especially identify with what Earth Angel had to say.  Also, you poetry is really very creative!   .........jo
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