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Essence of Some Truth
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Essence of Some Truth |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA 
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You said, “You just think you care for me because of things I’ve done for you, and no one has ever treated you that way until now; you know that’s true. I have known many ‘victims’ in my day, but you are truly one. I am not a nice man. I’ve done some really bad deeds. You love me because I’ve been nice to you; you feel this way because of your needs.” Silence. I felt blood rush; hard to breath. My head bowed a little, awaiting my voice to free. Chin close to chest, Words came at last, “Victim? Me? I never thought myself as one. No, that’s not the reason. What you’ve done is not the ticket that won my heart. It is what I know you would do even when we’re apart. That is one thing I love about you. But there’s more than one or two. I know that you always mean what you say even if it makes a rainy day. It is what I see in your eyes. No lies. And I know that you would be that way for any wounded bird, not just for me. That is why I am the reed that bends in the wind of you. I have always needed the essence of what is true.” |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
That is why I am the reed that bends in the wind of you. I have always needed the essence of what is true.” ================================ oh thats just stunning....... that make me wish I had wrote it!! lovely heart on sleeve sincerety poetess iliana.  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
JanetMarie, thank you so much for your generous comment (I'm still making some slight revisions).  .....jo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a perfect ending |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Thanks, Dixie -- I hope. |
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C? Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 190 |
to be honest I dont' usually read love poems. I liked this 'cause it was sincere and thoughtfully written. |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
You show some real vulnerability here, right from the heart. I think this may have been a tough write for you. Well done. Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
C? You are a kind soul....yes, it was from my heart, and it was sincere. and thanks for reading. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
kayjay -- vulnerable? me? No. Yes, well, maybe, but probably not; it depends....lol... yes, I think I was at the time. Yes, you are correct, it was a difficult write. You are pretty perceptive, aren't you! ....jo |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
iliana, you are as gentle and supple as a willow swaying in a soft Spring breeze... EA |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
I thought this a very sincere and lovely write. Isn't truth the most valuable thing? Pepper |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Earth Angel, I pray so. Thanks for reading and posting, sweet one! PS: Perhaps, you can put in a few prayers for this one (not me) for he needs them right now. It's a long story. ....jo |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
peppermint35 -- (like your tasty name) -- yes, I think it is even when it hurts. Thanks for your post and taking the time to read. ....jo |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
iliana, I need not know the "long story", Dear One. I will send prayers up for your beloved. God bless you both! Rainbow healing hugs, EA |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Linda, whoops, too late, I already sent it. Thanks. |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
The elements of real within this weave are moving. We're all wounded somehow, and I hope that love spells a healing resolve and forgiveness of one's self. Beautiful heartpiece. Sincerely, Reg |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
well done... told in a way that I truly enjoy..and the content ..the feelings themselves..real..to the reader with heart and soul.. yes... very well done |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
powerful writing, Jo; I think I understand where you're coming from. I'm glad you're there to help out. luv ya, Cathy |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
This was so intimate and intense, like I shouldn't have been here. brilliant. left me wanting more. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
I think poems we find most difficult emotionally are the ones we need to write, for they give us self-investigation, which is not a bad thing. (I still like this one! ) Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
This is such a genuine write... and in it I can see a little bit more of your heart (a beautiful thing). To be able to look into someone and see the truth in them takes a lot of discernment... so well done I love this poem. Always, Alyssa PS read your reply to EA and just wanted you to know... my prayers are there too. Hope things are well for you. With you as a friend I know he has the support he needs for whatever the issue[s] may be... Poems are made by fools like me, |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
GG, that means so much to me. Thank you so much. |
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