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iliana
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0 posted 2004-06-23 12:51 PM



You said,
“You just think you care for me
because of things I’ve done for you,
and no one has ever
treated you that way until now;
you know that’s true.
I have known many ‘victims’
in my day,
but you are truly one.
I am not a nice man.
I’ve done
some really bad deeds.
You love me because I’ve been nice to you;
you feel this way
because of your needs.”
Silence.
I felt blood rush;
hard to breath.
My head bowed a little,
awaiting my voice to free.
Chin close to chest,
Words came at last,
“Victim?  Me?
I never thought myself as one.
No,
that’s not the reason.
What you’ve done is not
the ticket that won my heart.
It is what I know you would do
even when we’re apart.
That is one thing
I love about you.
But there’s more than one or two.
I know that you always mean what you say
even if it makes a rainy day.
It is what I see in your eyes.
No lies.
And I know that you would be that way
for any wounded bird,
not just for me.
That is why I am the reed
that bends in the wind of you.
I have always needed
the essence of what is true.”  

© Copyright 2004 J.A.A.Powell - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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1 posted 2004-06-23 01:13 AM


That is why I am the reed
that bends in the wind of you.
I have always needed
the essence of what is true.”  
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oh thats just stunning.......
that make me wish I had wrote it!!
lovely heart on sleeve sincerety poetess iliana.

iliana
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2 posted 2004-06-23 01:17 AM


JanetMarie, thank you so much for your generous comment (I'm still making some slight revisions).   .....jo
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3 posted 2004-06-23 02:54 AM


a perfect ending
iliana
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4 posted 2004-06-23 03:44 AM


Thanks, Dixie -- I hope.  
C?
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5 posted 2004-06-24 01:07 AM


to be honest I dont' usually read love poems. I liked this 'cause it was sincere and thoughtfully written.
kayjay
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6 posted 2004-06-24 01:10 AM


You show some real vulnerability here, right from the heart.  I think this may have been a tough write for you.  Well done.  Ken

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

iliana
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7 posted 2004-06-24 01:47 AM


C? You are a kind soul....yes, it was from my heart, and it was sincere.   and thanks for reading.  
iliana
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8 posted 2004-06-24 01:54 AM


kayjay -- vulnerable? me? No.  Yes, well, maybe, but probably not; it depends....lol... yes, I think I was at the time.  Yes, you are correct, it was a difficult write.  You are pretty perceptive, aren't you!     ....jo
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9 posted 2004-06-24 01:54 AM


iliana, you are as gentle and supple as a willow swaying in a soft Spring breeze...


EA

peppermint35
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10 posted 2004-06-24 01:57 AM


I thought this a very sincere and lovely write.  Isn't truth the most valuable thing?

Pepper
"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

iliana
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11 posted 2004-06-24 02:01 AM


Earth Angel, I pray so.  Thanks for reading and posting, sweet one!  PS:  Perhaps, you can put in a few prayers for this one (not me) for he needs them right now.  It's a long story.   ....jo
iliana
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12 posted 2004-06-24 02:03 AM


peppermint35 -- (like your tasty name) -- yes, I think it is even when it hurts.  Thanks for your post and taking the time to read.   ....jo
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13 posted 2004-06-24 02:16 AM


iliana, I need not know the "long story", Dear One. I will send prayers up for your beloved. God bless you both!

Rainbow healing hugs,
EA

iliana
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14 posted 2004-06-24 02:32 AM


Linda, whoops, too late, I already sent it.  Thanks.
rwood
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15 posted 2004-06-24 07:43 AM


The elements of real within this weave are moving. We're all wounded somehow, and I hope that love spells a healing resolve and forgiveness of one's self. Beautiful heartpiece.

Sincerely,
Reg

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16 posted 2004-06-24 09:46 AM


well done... told in a way that I truly enjoy..and the content ..the feelings themselves..real..to the reader with heart and soul..

yes... very well done

Sadelite
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17 posted 2004-06-24 10:00 AM


powerful writing, Jo;  I think I understand where you're coming from.  I'm glad you're there to help out.
               luv ya,
                Cathy

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18 posted 2004-06-24 10:04 AM


This was so intimate and intense, like I shouldn't have been here. brilliant. left me wanting more.
vandana
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19 posted 2004-06-24 10:18 AM


enjoyed
kayjay
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20 posted 2004-06-24 05:01 PM


I think poems we find most difficult emotionally are the ones we need to write, for they give us self-investigation, which is not a bad thing.  
(I still like this one! ) Ken

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

GG
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21 posted 2004-06-25 01:53 AM


This is such a genuine write... and in it I can see a little bit more of your heart (a beautiful thing).
To be able to look into someone and see the truth in them takes a lot of discernment... so well done
I love this poem.

Always, Alyssa
PS read your reply to EA and just wanted you to know... my prayers are there too. Hope things are well for you. With you as a friend I know he has the support he needs for whatever the issue[s] may be...

Poems are made by fools like me,
But only God can make a tree.
                  Joyce kilmer

iliana
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22 posted 2004-06-25 03:04 AM


GG, that means so much to me.  Thank you so much.  
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