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Open Poetry #32

On The Inside/Outside

alibaster
Member

since 2001-07-07

Posts 299
In my own private hell...(PA).

0 posted 2004-06-22 01:39 PM

If I died on the
outside
could you still hear
my heart beat?
If I were barely alive
could you save me from
the place my soul began to die?
...
And if I died on the
inside
could you still hear
me speak?
If I were to touch your skin
could you bring me
back again?
...
And if I died on the
outside
could you find
my mind?
If I were to breath my sickness into you
could you drink me down,
swallow me by the spoonful?
...
And if I died on the
inside
could you still hear
my fear?
If I were to drown in your eyes
could you be my paper angel
and pretend life has no good-byes?

a-alibaster June 22, 2004

"There is an alter ego which dwells within every soul."-alibaster

"If it doesn't bite, scratch, and make you bleed it isn't worth it"-alibaster

[This message has been edited by alibaster (06-22-2004 05:13 PM).]

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

1 posted 2004-06-22 02:23 PM

enjoyed the entire poem, lovely and soft, tender, but my favorite was the ending

If I were to drown in your eyes
could you be my paper angel
and pretend life has no good-byes?

oh yes, yes....smiles and hugs...good write.

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

2 posted 2004-06-22 02:36 PM

This is good, touching, so very sad. Excellent write.

Best to you, and happiness too.
Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

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