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The Insanity of Stay
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The Insanity of Stay |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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Black boxes of night empty each from cold unyielding eyes pressed against shadows within- absent- slow bending this, my skin of river, stretching stone - rough beneath the unwilling soul Whose hands you have held straying and wading through branches of unforgiving time -waiting to steal any chance of happiness pieces of memory float toward earth trampled under feet never learning to stop I invite you in, to soak through waters of life-- given like a good poem to fall soft from your lips your stars falling ----black & light with movement from crimson center separating air and water on thin lines such empty hands facing skyward - do they too feel damp against your shadow Tomorrow, the world will begin again the grass will turn implausible green yet even after the petals have fallen we remember why love began the original sin -- Trace the glimpse of dragonflies skimming water -- with their wings -- here, where only stillness remains I stay ~~**~~ le vent chante avec le calme doux calme de nuit sien beauté sur mes lèvres ~~**~~ |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
greeneyes, There is much to this. I've got to step out now, but will have to read this again. Thank you for posting this. It may have some answers or at least questions for me. Thanks again. Sadelite |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Exquisite write here Lauren... Gawd this is SO beautiful! Love ya pretty lady~ Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
it seems we always remember |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"even after the petals have fallen we remember why love began the original sin --" ~ and yes, dear poetessa contessa, that is so often the reason for "The Insanity of Stay"... Lovin' hugs, Linda |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lauren, =================================== such empty hands facing skyward - do they too feel damp against your shadow =================================== Always food for thought coming from your tender heart expressed in ways I never expect but always enjoy. Nicely done.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"even after the petals have fallen we remember why love began the original sin -- Trace the glimpse of dragonflies skimming water -- with their wings -- here, where only stillness remains I stay" Lauren, I just got goosebumps! Awesome, awesome to be able to take the reader to the feel of the dragonfly skimming water! Awesome! Did I say awesome? Yes, I did! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Black boxes of night empty each from cold unyielding eyes pressed against shadows within- absent- slow bending this, my skin of river, stretching stone - rough beneath the unwilling soul ================================= I invite you in, to soak through waters of life-- given like a good poem to fall soft from your lips your stars falling ----black & light with movement from crimson center separating air and water on thin lines such empty hands facing skyward - do they too feel damp against your shadow Tomorrow, the world will begin again the grass will turn implausible green yet even after the petals have fallen we remember why love began the original sin -- =========================== good lordy girl.... I could read you till I went blind.  "within- absent- slow bending this, my skin of river, that personifi ROCKS!!! ( so does the poet)  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Black boxes of night empty each from cold unyielding eyes pressed against shadows within- absent- slow bending As always, you romance the flow, warm with the love. *hugs* dear Lauren~ |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Oh, these words... Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful! ~tier) |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I invite you in, to soak through waters of life-- given like a good poem to fall soft from your lips your stars falling ----black & light with movement from crimson center separating air and water on thin lines such empty hands facing skyward - do they too feel damp against your shadow ---- sigh----- as always beautiful |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
YES Lauren...yes indeed. You have been missed my  sister.  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
So beautifully said...every poem of yours is a lesson in how to write. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Tequilia_Sunrise Senior Member
since 2003-02-19
Posts 612Lochalsh, Ontario, Canada |
Beautiful |
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