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I See You
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I See You |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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I See You I see you the flower you are As bright as the brightest star As lovely as a dove of white Flying softly in the light Passing o’er the fields of green Lighting fireflies in my dream Singing to a heavens art Setting fire to my heart You are the friction lights the spark You are the trill of meadowlark The wind that whispers in my ear The sip of wine that mists my clear You dance upon my egos bed Intoxicate my heart and head Knight me with your velvet glove Crown me with your crown of love You are my Eden’s innocence The life of all my sentience |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This sits well on a Kansa hill listening to the meadowlark's trill, Sy...a good Sunday morning to you!  |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Beautiful! I love the way you see. Patricia |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
You are my Eden’s innocence The life of all my sentience what perfect closing lines! |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
A beautiful tribute to the one who sets your hearton fire. Well done Sy. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"You dance upon my egos bed Intoxicate my heart and head Knight me with your velvet glove Crown me with your crown of love You are my Eden’s innocence The life of all my sentience" Sy, this is one huge SIGH! Loved this morning's read. ~Morning hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Be still my beating heart -- take a breath Susan! This was breathtaking in its passion and devotion. Much enjoyed.  SusanThe whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"You are my Eden’s innocence" That one line was worth the read -- but the whole poem in its totality -- just awesome, Seymour! |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
Sy, Another brilliant example of your innate talent of forming from nothing, something that captivates. It is a beautiful tribute to the one who makes you whole. You have a great way of rhyming without forcing anything in your writing. It just fits perfectly together. And, it is always a heartfelt message, in my limited experience of reading your work during my still young stay here. Kevin |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Beautiful! Eric |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
You are the friction lights the spark You are the trill of meadowlark The wind that whispers in my ear The sip of wine that mists my clear You dance upon my egos bed Intoxicate my heart and head Knight me with your velvet glove Crown me with your crown of love You are my Eden’s innocence The life of all my sentience ============================ YOU already are a King me sweet Sy-babers... King of cadence.. King of couplets.. King of way cool. This was pure poetry in motion when read aloud...danced across me lips and around the room.  Your wise eyes see it all.  *ww*    |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Yes, Dear Poet they see you ~ as you seen them, they truly do. They crown you with their glowing love That shines on you from Up Above. Your words spill so gently from your loving, sonneteering spirit, Dear One With The Angels  Angel hugs 'n kisses, EA  |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
You paint with the most tender colors and the softest strokes of sentiment. Very beautiful Liz |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine Patricia Thank you for the lovely. kaile Thank you friend. scorpio Thanks for the well done. Nancy Thanks for the big sigh. Susan Thank you so much. iliana Awesome is a big word, Hugs Kevo Thank you for the comp. Ericc Beautiful is good. JM, You just earned another Kiss. Where are you Randy? WWRS Earth Angel If an Angel tells you it's a keeper, than I'll keep it. Hugs Elizabeth Love you too. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You see with such loving eyes, my friend... thank you for sharing such beauty with us. *S* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
suthern Thank you |
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