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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2004-06-13 07:16 AM


I See You

I see you the flower you are
As bright as the brightest star
As lovely as a dove of white
Flying softly in the light

Passing o’er the fields of green
Lighting fireflies in my dream
Singing to a heavens art
Setting fire to my heart

You are the friction lights the spark
You are the trill of meadowlark
The wind that whispers in my ear
The sip of wine that mists my clear

You dance upon my egos bed
Intoxicate my heart and head
Knight me with your velvet glove
Crown me with your crown of love

You are my Eden’s innocence
The life of all my sentience


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Sunshine
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1 posted 2004-06-13 07:30 AM


This sits well on a Kansa hill
listening to the meadowlark's trill,

Sy...a good Sunday morning to you!


Patricia
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2 posted 2004-06-13 07:56 AM


Beautiful!  I love the way you see.

Patricia

kaile
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3 posted 2004-06-13 08:22 AM


You are my Eden’s innocence
The life of all my sentience

what perfect closing lines!

scorpio
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4 posted 2004-06-13 09:28 AM


A beautiful tribute to the one who sets your hearton fire.  Well done Sy.

believe in what your heart feels...

Enchantress
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5 posted 2004-06-13 11:02 AM


"You dance upon my egos bed
Intoxicate my heart and head
Knight me with your velvet glove
Crown me with your crown of love

You are my Eden’s innocence
The life of all my sentience"

Sy, this is one huge SIGH!
Loved this morning's read.
~Morning hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

Susan
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walking the surreal
6 posted 2004-06-13 11:56 AM


Be still my beating heart -- take a breath Susan!  This was breathtaking in its passion and devotion.  Much enjoyed.

Susan

The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart.

iliana
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7 posted 2004-06-13 01:10 PM


"You are my Eden’s innocence"

That one line was worth the read -- but the whole poem in its totality -- just awesome, Seymour!  

Kevo
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8 posted 2004-06-13 01:19 PM


Sy,

Another brilliant example of your innate talent of forming from nothing, something that captivates.  It is a beautiful tribute to the one who makes you whole.  You have a great way of rhyming without forcing anything in your writing.  It just fits perfectly together.  And, it is always a heartfelt message, in my limited experience of reading your work during my still young stay here.

Kevin

Ericc
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9 posted 2004-06-13 01:31 PM


Beautiful!

Eric

Janet Marie
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10 posted 2004-06-13 01:42 PM


You are the friction lights the spark
You are the trill of meadowlark
The wind that whispers in my ear
The sip of wine that mists my clear

You dance upon my egos bed
Intoxicate my heart and head
Knight me with your velvet glove
Crown me with your crown of love

You are my Eden’s innocence
The life of all my sentience

============================

YOU already are a King me sweet Sy-babers...
King of cadence..
King of couplets..
King of way cool.

This was pure poetry in motion when read aloud...danced across me lips and around the room.

Your wise eyes see it all.

*ww*



Earth Angel
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11 posted 2004-06-14 12:52 PM



Yes, Dear Poet they see you ~
as you seen them, they truly do.
They crown you with their glowing love
That shines on you from Up Above.

Your words spill so gently from your loving, sonneteering spirit, Dear One With The Angels

Angel hugs 'n kisses,
EA

Elizabeth Santos
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12 posted 2004-06-14 05:05 AM



You paint with the most tender colors and the softest strokes of sentiment.

Very beautiful

Liz

Seymour Tabin
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13 posted 2004-06-14 08:33 AM


Sunshine


Patricia
Thank you for the lovely.

kaile
Thank you friend.

scorpio
Thanks for the well done.

Nancy
Thanks for the big sigh.

Susan
Thank you so much.

iliana
Awesome is a big word, Hugs

Kevo
Thank you for the comp.

Ericc
Beautiful is good.

JM,
You just earned another Kiss. Where are you Randy? WWRS

Earth Angel
If an Angel tells you it's a keeper, than I'll keep it. Hugs


Elizabeth
Love you too.

suthern
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14 posted 2004-06-16 10:31 AM


You see with such loving eyes, my friend... thank you for sharing such beauty with us. *S*
Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
15 posted 2004-06-16 11:26 AM


suthern
Thank you

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