Open Poetry #32 |
Live For Now |
Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
Welcome Home, My Child Was spoken as I passed Into the unknown I swore did not exist I looked around the Darkness The unforgiving Void And saw naught, save the Black You ignored My Love Denied the Paradise I created For you I glanced about Trying to imagine such a place Paradise As spoken by that Voice Yet, sight was not possible Worry not, My son For you are forgiven Now and when your time Truly comes Where was the understanding I was in the Beyond The life passing from my hands Yet there was no sense of Peace I did not belong There was somewhere else to be Have no fear in your heart I will not forsake you When you are called A favor I ask Allow a decade or two To live your life So I might fully prepare your place at My side Whenever I feel blue, I start breathing again... http://www.cmlb.net/ringo [This message has been edited by Ringo (06-13-2004 02:06 AM).] |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Sounds like you've been visiting the philosophy forum, Ringo. Those experiences......make us think! |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
This is a very inspiring poem. I really enjoyed it. Your structure was well done and it flowed quite well. This is simply a great poem with a grand inspiration. Kevin |
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Michelle_loves_Mike
since 2003-12-20
Posts 1189Pennsylvania |
ringo my dearest friend, you know my views on all this sort of thing....however, the range of subject matter, that you can bring into a poem (scribble)and make it work,,,,,not only in the mind, but work in the heart,,is truely amazing. Great work my man, you are, in many ways, an artist,,,, Michelle I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a needed read |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"Allow a decade or two To live your life So I might fully prepare your place at My side" This was such an inspirational and thought-provoking read for me this morning, Ringo. I loved your closing lines ... beautifully expressed. Very much enjoyed this. Best wishes, /Kit |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
thank you for the inspiration, truly revolutionary...smiles and hugs. |
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