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RobertB
Senior Member

since 1999-09-26

Posts 1104
Champaign, IL

0 posted 2004-06-12 10:12 PM

Ponds of Windsor

Oh that day of 20 years
NO!! 30 now gone by.
Insignificant decades passing
For the grip it has on me
Chokes the present life
Into blackness pondering
A shoreline vague with abstract
Ripples lapping up time
In layered sand leading
Me to water calling a name
I won’t remember.
Because time is a barrier that
Separates me from then…
A canvas I stare at wishing

Robert

I wish this were so much better for the goosebumps I had in the coming of this deserve more.

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

1 posted 2004-06-12 10:28 PM

"A canvas I stare at wishing"
Goosebumps conveyed.
Very well written.
TD

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

2 posted 2004-06-12 10:49 PM

A shoreline vague with abstract
Ripples lapping up time
In layered sand leading
Me to water calling a name
I won’t remember

Awesome writing. Enjoyed. Chris

Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale.
Hans Christian Anderson

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2004-06-12 11:39 PM

Robert

So much of this poem plays true for my own life...thank you. Time can make such good poetry, like this!

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

4 posted 2004-06-12 11:54 PM

RobertB~

'Ripples lapping up time
In layered sand leading
Me to water calling a name
I won’t remember.
Because time is a barrier that
Separates me from then…
A canvas I stare at wishing'

Well ... until this, I didn't realize goosebumps were contagious~
But ... I got 'em~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

noles1@totcon.com

Snow

Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain

5 posted 2004-06-13 01:13 AM

i am so glad that i didn't have to wait too long after knowing this was in the works...

... goosebumps happen :-)

S~

"yet each man kills the thing he loves
by each let this be heard,
some do it with a bitter look,
some with a flattering word"
oscar wilde

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

6 posted 2004-06-13 01:36 AM

"A shoreline vague with abstract
Ripples lapping up time
In layered sand leading
Me to water calling a name
I won’t remember.
Because time is a barrier that
Separates me from then…
A canvas I stare at wishing"

There is a bit of a ghost with this.! *smile*

Kevo
Member

since 2004-06-02

Posts 466
Navarro County, Texas, USA

7 posted 2004-06-13 01:40 AM

Your closing line captures the sentiments of the poem well. It is a keeper...instant classic. Thanks for sharing it.

Kevin

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

8 posted 2004-06-17 12:57 PM

dang

(sigh)

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