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Reflections on Grief - I
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Reflections on Grief - I |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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No Battle Plan Grief is a breathing thing Its soft pant drips drool On moments that might be happy The harsh, ragged gasp of it Makes night something to dread Its power isn’t a measure of love But an accounting of the emptiness That echoes with each beat of heart When love leaves And takes hope with it Though it often introduces This unwelcome companion Death isn’t prerequisite Any great loss allows its flourish Gnawing on soul’s marrow It fuels itself by feasting On the energy and will Needed to oust it Thus insuring Continued existence Its sense of survival’s strong enough To destroy that of its host Tears are but one by-product I know some have vanquished it But how do I fill the gaping hole When what I grieve Is the me I thought I was |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
this is absolutely the best thing you have ever written...or if not best, its up there in your top 3... the opening verse......wow.......and the follow through......whew...makes me glad my muse is quiet...can't match writing of this quality  oh...and lady... if you are missing you? just ask me...I got a tight hold on your friendship |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Its power isn’t a measure of love But an accounting of the emptiness That echoes with each beat of heart ========================= damn............. *speechless moth* ( and? the moth is giddy..a double post) woo hoo!!  When your own emptiness is all thats getting through There comes a point when youre not sure why youre still talking I passed that point long ago Jackson Browne |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
jellybeans: You humble me, my friend... I thank you for lending the courage I needed to post it... I do love you so!!! Keep holding on, lady. *S* JM: You? Speechless??? LOL I'm not sure if that's good or bad... but I'll be presumptious and thank you... blondes understand giddy! *S* |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
if you don't mind, I'll keep this and part II in my library (though I haven't read part II yet, I know it will be a keeper) |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Now you know I'm smiling at the comeback of this... |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
suthern "But how do I fill the gaping hole When what I grieve Is the me I thought I was" You fill it with the beauty that is you now!  for this fine poem! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
any time the moth is quiet tis a very good thing. even better is when I'm made speechless by such an impressive, poignant write. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
a fine write... moving to the part II regards sudhir |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent excellent write!! Heart hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Suthern girl -- we're like the growth rings of a tree -- you're still there just another ring is starting. (great write!) |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Laura, this is masterful....this trio of poems has to be one of the best works I've seen in this site. In the past you've shared with me the feeling that your poetry doesn't compare to that of the quality poets here.... Don't be saying that any more, Suthern gal -- you just proved you are one of them. I'm putting this on #1 so anybody who starts reading can see what I think. I'm going to put the same words on the others too. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
A poignant read, Suthern. To mourn what we once were, why, there's nothing that can bring the old us back, is there? Wonderful writing. Off to read the other two. Corinne |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I know some have vanquished it But how do I fill the gaping hole When what I grieve Is the me I thought I was Oh suthern, this really touched my heart. Hugs to you, sweet lady Ethel |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
suthern, You caught me totally unprepared! I wish you peace. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
suthern, This is an outstanding description of grief. I hope you get beyond the actual feel of it, as I know it's not a pleasant place to be. You are a wonderful person/poetess who brightens up many peoples' day. You have brightened mine a number of times! Feel better. NOW it's off to the races! I'm betting on NO.#2! See you there soon. Sadelite |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
*keeper* |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SweetSuthern~ The depth and the passion of this penning is remarkable~ 'Its power isn’t a measure of love But an accounting of the emptiness That echoes with each beat of heart When love leaves And takes hope with it' Oh dear lady ... this is superb~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed reading this...James |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
WOW!!! what an insightful, excellent write...probably the best I have ever read of your work. Standing Ovation! Curtain Call! Brava! Brava! Brava! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
PS: Mind??? *S* Dear lady... I'm immensely honored... thank you so much!! Sunshine: It told me it wasn't finished... little did I know it meant it so fervently! LOL Martie: But I'd still come up empty! *G* Thank you so much, kind lady! *S* JM: You humble me, my friend... I thank you so very, very much. *S* Sudhir: Thank you so much! *S* Enchantress: Both hugs and kind words are greatly appreciated... thank you! *S* iliana: What a great comparison... thank you! *S* Ratleader: You're one of the finest poets anywhere, my friend... so such praise means the world to me... thank you ever so much!! (even if you are a tattle tale! LOL) Corinne: No... there isn't... and finding a way to be comfortable with what's left isn't always easy. *S* Thank you!!! *S* garysgirl: What a lovely heart to touch. *S* Thank you very much! *S* Larry: To tell the truth, it did me, too. *G* Thank you so much, my friend... I wish the same for you... always. *S* Sadelite: You are dear... and I thank you so much for your kind comments on both poem and poet! *S* Midnitesun: Thank you, my friend. *S* Marge: Oh, dear friend... I thank you so! *S* JamesMichael: I'm glad... thank you! *S* steavenr: Your enthusiasm and generosity truly touch my heart... I thank you so much!! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Three new arrivals means the first three get a bump! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
Moved and speechless... SG |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Ratleader: You honor me, my friend... and I thank you from the depths of my heart. *S* Simply Gold: Thank you so very much! *S* |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
You always learn things about yourself when you grieve... at least I do. Wish that did't hurt so much. Don't know how you can take this and make it so perfect... but you did! And thank you. Always, Alyssa Poems are made by fools like me, |
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