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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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you there with your tunes and towel and edges of woman getting burned lucky sun you show him you... your face, your thighs your breasts sometimes and when it is just him and you alone you offer him there and tell him his touch is warm that you love how he leaves your skin with a blush from naughty dreams today I wore my orange jacket and yellow gloves could you pretend that we are alone and that I am him that lucky sun _____________Dark |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
this poem for some reason reminded me of Phantom of the Opera....so sad for him... Good write, enjoyed. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Dark Stranger Interesting write, enjoyed. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and edges of woman getting burned ===================== you know Im loving that line.... and the image of you riding black beauty on the PCH in that orange jacket and yellow gloves... me thinks youre gonna cause a stir. lol  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
LOL@JM!! Yup..you'll cause a stir alright. Yes..you can pretend to be sun any warm day.. Hugs YOU! ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Ah, very nice....you have a good eye, DS! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Very good write, my friend. Well expressed. jwesley |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
LJ; Humble thanks to you....and I suspect we are all phantoms at times.. ________________ Sy, your reply is a gift and I appreciate you _______________ JM pure manly personna huh...do you think the knee high patent leather boots will be too much macho for the streets? Thanks for the visit and I hope you didn't get too much sun..(grin) ______________ Ms E...mmmmmmmmmmm can I now? perhaps the tanning salon that is 24 hours will give us the time we need to ...oh sorry...lol thanks hon ____________________ RL, thanks for the visit my friend, always a treat to have your reads _____________ JW, arrigoto for the walk by and linger. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Can you pretend that you are him.... Mr Sun? Love this, so good to see you hon. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Good heaven's .. where is my suntan lotion?!  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
DS Now you got me singing, "you are the sunshine of my life"!  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I can only smile here |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Oh, to envy the sun -- now, that's ambition! Great write, Dark Stranger! |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
interesting! is it geting hot in here  really liked the way you wrote this  |
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CastleGuard Senior Member
since 2003-04-30
Posts 760Alberta, Canada |
Erotically charged. CG |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
AHEM! clearing my throat yes, wear the knee-high patent leathers and the form fitting riding breeches I've got sun-burned thighs just from reading you  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
You have a way with certain kinds of imagery...can't think of anyone who does it better. Mind if I study how you do it, so I can make my own poetry better? ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
You are a force of poem... yes... |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy your read |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
This is something I can feel all the way through. Not fair, sometimes, is it.. Sandra |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
kind of on the edge here, cool very cool |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
...you certainly have a way with heat....I mean, words.... ~K~ |
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