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Despair |
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wordwizard Member
since 2003-09-08
Posts 483on the way to next world |
So many have something to say yet so few will pave the way; why, only a trickle will ever succeed most others fall in the trail of greed something to say, but never tell some darkened thought known all too well, so few know very little of what to say so little of that few will pave that way. Nothing really ever gets said and done divide and conquer rules are still sung; do any upper crust members ever succeed? most of us call for help in time of need. Trickled images of gaunt men and silent screams haunt suspended bridges of tormented dreams, their mandate is to acquire through greed few of them ever witness what others need. It's all part of a greater plan in lands of the free, understand? Some manage their own affairs better than most, Magic garden exiles, dismissed by the Host. © Copyright 2004 ecrivan |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
Brilliant. I cannot beleive no one has posted to this poem yet! Kissa * i'm saving. I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
A brilliant write for today, wordwizard! |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
yes brilliant glad i stopped and read this |
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wordwizard Member
since 2003-09-08
Posts 483on the way to next world |
Surprises never cease to amaze! And the word brilliant is in all of the comments?! The last stanza has been edited to balance the meter and clarify the thoughts there. |
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