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wordwizard
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0 posted 2004-06-04 12:49 PM


So many have something to say
yet so few will pave the way;
why, only a trickle will ever succeed
most others fall in the trail of greed

something to say, but never tell
some darkened thought known all too well,
so few know very little of what to say
so little of that few will pave that way.


Nothing really ever gets said and done
divide and conquer rules are still sung;
do any upper crust members ever succeed?
most of us call for help in time of need.

Trickled images of gaunt men and silent screams
haunt suspended bridges of tormented dreams,
their mandate is to acquire through greed
few of them ever witness what others need.

It's all part of a greater plan
in lands of the free, understand?
Some manage their own affairs better than most,
Magic garden exiles, dismissed by the Host.

© Copyright 2004 ecrivan



© Copyright 2004 Martin Dansky - All Rights Reserved
kissa~rachelle
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1 posted 2004-06-04 01:23 AM


Brilliant. I cannot beleive no one has posted to this poem yet!

Kissa

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iliana
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2 posted 2004-06-04 03:05 AM


A brilliant write for today, wordwizard!
MGROVES
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3 posted 2004-06-04 03:45 AM


yes brilliant  glad i stopped and read this


wordwizard
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4 posted 2004-06-04 09:54 PM


Surprises never cease to amaze! And the word brilliant is in all of the comments?! The last stanza has been edited to balance the meter and clarify the thoughts there.


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