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Like a Bad Dream (A Duncan Duet)
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Like a Bad Dream (A Duncan Duet) |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
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I have tried for two years and change to scrub the residue of this feeling from my skin But always a trace of feel remains like a bad dream staying with me reminding me of the secrets that sleep in quiet mind, whispering that I might not forget Though you explained the whys of your lie still my trust is punctured, the enemy of the past a sucking wound until I cannot catch my breath Left again with love and fear wondering if they always partner or if I might hope to cut in on the dance Thanks Duncan!  "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent excellent duet Susan & Duncan!! Wonderful blending of thoughts here...love it! ~Smiles & Hugs to you both, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
But always a trace of feel remains like a bad dream staying with me reminding me of the secrets that sleep in quiet mind, whispering that I might not forget Susan and Duncan! I want to quote the whole thing. You make me feel sane, as every line of this is real. Living with the past too closely, fearing the worst for the future. More wonderful than I have words to express! |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Hmmmmm...change those words around just a bit and ya get "A Duncan Duet Like a Bad Dream".  Thanks for giving me recognition as co-author Myrtle but the heart of the poem is yours, I just did a little editing. Thanks Nancy and Gem for your time and responses. The due of this duet (especially the wierd format)...all goes to Susan.  |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
a fine blend of talent, can we expect more?  |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Nancy~  Thank you for always taking the time!Gemma~ I think we could exchange heartache forever...  Duncan~  You know the main idea came from you! (I was telling you how some dreams leave you feeling a certain way all day and I used your response in that conversation for the main theme in this piece, then you did the edit and wrote some. That is how this one was born!) So take credit..Ed~ Seems like every duet I do is not planned, it just happens...so who knows but thanks for reading and being my friend! "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" ~Sarah McLachlan~ |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Could have sworn one person wrote this -- now that's a good duet. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
However it was accomplished, my friends, it was wonderfully done. Applause to you both. jwesley |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
excellent ending! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I've had a few...James |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Wonderful duet. I LOVE seeing duets on the board. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Duets bring out the best in people, y'know? Smiling here...  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is indeed a treat--and I wish I'd been in on that conversation. thoughtful, interesting, and I particularly enjoyed the format.  |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
WOW !! BRAVA !! |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Still digging this muchos. |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Great write! Eric |
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