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to spring back after impact
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to spring back after impact |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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to spring back after impact circumstance will not allow me once more to pour out my heart I hear it vibrate like that of a basket ball rebounding from high hoop down to concrete cracked where the scuffle of shoes and knock of knees slam dunk the trash can instead The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
From scoring to landing in a trash can...quite a comedown. A very innovative way to get your point across...I love it! p.s....next time don't pick a guy who dribbles  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
There is something to be said for spectator sports! That way you don't risk losing the game with a technical.  (been there, done that) big hugs, Maree~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ahhhh, Maree...you are stronger then you know, I think, just look at the way you make ink!  Wonderful writing, my friend! |
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marcel Senior Member
since 2003-03-02
Posts 660az, usa |
This was very interesting, especially from a big basketball fan as myself....both subjects are relative to each other......nice write |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
and off to the landfill...sad stuff here Maree |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I hear the vibration of the hoop... it echoes... |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
hmmm... youknow this hurts underneath  ...dont matter what ya say really enjoyed this, but, you never fail to leave us with a deep impression. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I concur with Balladeer on all accounts!  EA |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
I love the metaphor, very good write, it definitly made me sit back and think a minute. Well done. ~Live and Laugh~ The memories are worth the pain when the happiness is outweighs the sorrow |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Maree...I've seen your strength and know that you spring back better than most, I think we just need to attach our hearts to one of those big bungee cords, you know, make it a little faster on the rebound and a lot less likly to hit on the way down and shatter (((Hugs))) |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Maree -- Ouuuucccch! Great anaology -- I hope you spring back real soon. .....jo |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hey guys, thanks so much for popping by and saying hi and for your lovely replies, no need to worry though, this wasn't meant to be a sad poem, was just being er reflective. I appreciate you all.... and Bal "dribble"? hehe.. here's a kiss  Thanks again. Maree  The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
as always your words never cease to amaze me...time and time again you find this way to take mere words and make them into much much more. i felt the sadness of this but i also know your strength my friend. hugs to you. take care, amy "When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter" |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
cool write Kareem Abdul Maree. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
just had to come back to LOL @ Aeminal |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hey Raphy...love ya! hehe Dawn? it suits me don'tcha think? hehe The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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