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Dark Angel
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0 posted 2004-05-29 11:29 PM


to spring back after impact


circumstance will not allow me
once more
to pour
out my heart

I hear it vibrate
like that of a basket ball

                   rebounding

from high hoop down
to concrete
cracked

where the scuffle of shoes
and knock of knees

slam dunk the trash can instead

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

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Balladeer
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1 posted 2004-05-29 11:38 PM


From scoring to landing in a trash can...quite a comedown. A very innovative way to get your point across...I love it!

p.s....next time don't pick a guy who dribbles

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2 posted 2004-05-29 11:40 PM



There is something to be said for spectator sports!  
That way you don't risk losing the game with a technical.    
(been there, done that)

big hugs, Maree~  

Martie
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3 posted 2004-05-29 11:41 PM


Ahhhh, Maree...you are stronger then you know, I think, just look at the way you make ink!     Wonderful writing, my friend!
marcel
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4 posted 2004-05-30 12:40 PM


This was very interesting, especially from a big basketball fan as myself....both subjects are relative to each other......nice write
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5 posted 2004-05-30 01:09 AM


and off to the landfill...sad stuff here Maree
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6 posted 2004-05-30 09:39 AM


I hear the vibration
of the hoop...

it echoes...


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7 posted 2004-05-30 12:40 PM


enjoyed
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8 posted 2004-05-30 08:15 PM


hmmm...
youknow this hurts underneath
...dont matter what ya say

really enjoyed this, but, you never fail to leave us with a deep impression.


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9 posted 2004-05-30 08:29 PM


I concur with Balladeer on all accounts!


EA

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10 posted 2004-05-30 09:40 PM


I love the metaphor, very good write, it definitly made me sit back and think a minute. Well done.
~Live and Laugh~

The memories are worth the pain when the happiness is outweighs the sorrow
~Bella~

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11 posted 2004-05-30 11:11 PM


Maree...I've seen your strength and know that you spring back better than most, I think we just need to attach our hearts to one of those big bungee cords, you know, make it a little faster on the rebound and a lot less likly to hit on the way down and shatter
(((Hugs)))

iliana
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12 posted 2004-05-31 01:20 AM


Maree -- Ouuuucccch!  Great anaology -- I hope you spring back real soon.   .....jo
Dark Angel
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13 posted 2004-05-31 04:59 AM


Hey guys, thanks so much  for popping by and saying hi and for your lovely replies, no need to worry though, this wasn't meant to be a sad poem, was just being er reflective.

I appreciate you all....

and Bal "dribble"? hehe.. here's a kiss

Thanks again.

Maree

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

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14 posted 2004-05-31 10:22 AM


as always your words never cease
to amaze me...time and time again
you find this way to take mere words
and make them into much much more. i
felt the sadness of this but i also
know your strength my friend. hugs to
you. take care,
amy

"When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter"

Aenimal
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15 posted 2004-06-01 03:21 PM


cool write Kareem Abdul Maree.
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just had to come back to LOL @ Aeminal
Dark Angel
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17 posted 2004-06-01 05:55 PM


Hey Raphy...love ya!  hehe

Dawn? it suits me don'tcha think?  hehe

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

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