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Two Leaves
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Two Leaves |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Two Leaves They’ve turned the little bench toward the pond, so it is level now, not leaning like before. There are no tears today, and because there are few tears he sees that nothing else has changed. The leaves have grown with winter being past, and the trees look deeper now, more thoughtful; they let their branches dip a little lower than before as if they’re lost in contemplation, thinking thoughts of growing things he wouldn’t understand. There are no tears, and because there are few tears he sees these things and sees that nothing else has changed. And the flowers. One flower is missing as she was before, but nothing else has changed. Nothing of importance. There are no tears, and because there are few tears he notices the ducks, impatient in this early season, tending to their own affairs, the redwing bird that turns its head askance, wondering why he would be here on a bench, watching the lawn of grass wave down toward the water, wondering why he would look down too and close his eyes here in the middle of the day. There are no tears, and because there are few tears he doesn’t fail to see the leaf that falls down spinning from the greenbud tree, just as another lifts in the breeze. They pass, intent on trading places, so it seems to him, sitting here with no tears, and now while tears are few he knows two leaves are saying it is time for him to go. ~~J [This message has been edited by James_A_Fraser (05-27-2004 03:01 PM).] |
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time prophet Member
since 2003-07-30
Posts 371In New Zealand Amongst the Ancient Trees |
"nothing else has changed", could almost be a view of the world in general, good read James. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
kinda sad but not I don't know...this touched me though |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
They pass, intent on trading places, so it seems to him, sitting here with no tears, and while there few tears he knows two leaves are saying it is time for him to go. a great ending, James M |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
they let their branches dip a little lower than before as if they’re lost in contemplation, thinking thoughts of growing things he wouldn’t understand This is incredibly beautiful! *S* It has overtones of sadness, yes... but such insightful images... and they're depicted with a clarity that tears won't allow or would insist on blurring... so there's also strength and hope. *S* Magnificent work!! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
A fantastic write James.. Oh my yes!! How I enjoyed reading this piece. A keeper for sure! Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Excellent write James. JL  She said: ”You look cute in the dark.” |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
"to go..." and let go. I've read this several times, pretty much left with the profundity of it all... and yet, even though left fairly speechless after each reading... all I can say is thank you for writing. And don't stop. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Awesome write... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I really loved your first verse, and how the bench is level, not leaning! There's alot to be said for this, it's such a very peaceful setting, with no tears in the end. Yes!!! We try harder, don't we?? Fabulous writing, as always James_A~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Deeply touching! |
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