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Open Poetry #32

May 23rd

SimpleDiscourse
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 79

0 posted 2004-05-24 10:42 PM

we are weak from love
for it tears and it twists
and it tricks and it turns
me against you
you against me
us against them
them against us

are we driving on sunday roads?

artless souls are
meandering through
summer's back alleys
with their gold tinged leaves
and their whispered breaths
and the distinction between
shadows and darkness

in a dream
you are there
with water flowing
from your fingertips
am i thirsting for your touch?

a set of emerald eyes
watches from afar:
a house built on music
falling fast at its foundation

are we weak in our solitude?
does it rip
does it ravage
does it ruin
does it recall
a time when
bare feet could
dance upon heated pavement?

TerryW
Senior Member

since 2000-03-23

Posts 779
Louisville, Mississippi, USA

1 posted 2004-05-25 12:40 PM

Wow! Very strong emotional verse! I love this!

~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

2 posted 2004-05-25 10:05 AM

Very well done Erin
TD

Endlessecho
Member

since 2003-09-05

Posts 398
I live within myself

3 posted 2004-05-25 10:15 AM

Wow! Powerful peice. I really liked the intensity of this.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2004-05-25 12:51 PM

I don't even know what to say here...I could have written this, but not as awesome as it is coming from your pen

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