Pulling No Punches (for Sunshine)

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Sadelite
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0 posted 2004-05-23 01:19 AM

                                 “Sadie, my gal...
                             your poetry leaks feelings...

                          I have a bit more understanding now...
                           go for the real of it...
                             go for the feel
                              of it

                                 don't pull any punches, y'hear?”

                                                               (Sunshine's Response to "Memory Marks")

OK SUNSHINE, for you:

leak or drown
piano keys ups and downs
waiting
waiting for the time and sound.

When it came,
the surprise was me
I sent him go,
I loved him so.

        (No real reason other
          than he held my heart
             Too tightly.)

                                Hard worker but
                                not at me
                                Loved me back
                                Thought I wouldn’t mind
                                playing second fiddle to his time.

                                        Mistaken.

                               Four years down the road,
                              Got a letter:
                              “remember nothing but good times...
                                again I'd
                               like to see you."

Leak or drown
Piano key ups and downs
while awaiting his
Arrival.
Late. Habitually late
Or cancel.

Passion  there
But he worked too hard
At everything
Except
Me.
My soul I had to keep.

I sent him go.
Left a hole
Could not be filled
Neither
could it be emptied

  I sent him go,

[This message has been edited by Sadelite (05-24-2004 03:41 PM).]

Ratleader

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1 posted 2004-05-23 01:23 AM

Yeow! I like this!

MORE MORE MORE!

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Sadelite
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2 posted 2004-05-23 01:30 AM

Ratleader,
   You're as bad as Sunshine!  Do you know how many years ago this took place?  It's been bottled up for three decades!

no MORE, MORE, MORE   I'm drained...

  Thanks for your support.

muted

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3 posted 2004-05-23 01:35 AM

i admire the way youve dealt with these feelings.

this is a brave thing indeed

Sadelite
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4 posted 2004-05-23 01:40 AM

muted,
   Holding them in for thirty years-brave?  Don't think so.  I wish I would have had PIP
back then.   I might have gotten those feelings out.   I'm so glad this exist for others today.
                 Sadie

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

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5 posted 2004-05-23 04:00 AM

Good writing, Sadie! I'm glad you wrote this!

....jo

passing shadows
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6 posted 2004-05-23 04:58 AM

wow

Susan
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7 posted 2004-05-23 11:37 AM

Hmmmm, purging demons after years. Might have to give it a try. This was an excellent write. And yes, thank Heaven for PIP Talk and the understanding of those of like heart. Thanks for sharing.

Smiles -- Susan

The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart.

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
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8 posted 2004-05-23 11:43 AM

Writing of the soul sometimes does drain
from us...yet, in the end....our strength
is greater, our resolve unwavering...

Well done Sadie.

Sunshine

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9 posted 2004-05-23 01:03 PM

Oh my...
I hope I somehow
inspire more...

seems like this one
let the air out of the bag...
once or twice, even.

Oh...my...

Ericc
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10 posted 2004-05-23 03:17 PM

Perfectly said...

One great poet...wrting of another.

Eric

Ratleader

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11 posted 2004-05-24 12:20 PM

"no MORE, MORE, MORE I'm drained..."

That's one I've heard before....didn't believe it then either, and sure enough.....

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suthern

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12 posted 2004-05-24 12:56 PM

Yowser!!! *S* You can't give us this and not expect us to nag for more. *S*

Very powerful... excellent write!

Sunshine

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13 posted 2004-05-24 01:36 PM

HEH!

Sadelite
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14 posted 2004-05-24 02:25 PM

Thanks All for your your responses. As for writing more about this, probably not for a while. That creeps up on me less and less... Though it was a tough decision, good things have come. I'm very fortunate to have the life I have.
Sadie

[This message has been edited by Sadelite (05-24-2004 03:40 PM).]

TerryW
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15 posted 2004-05-24 03:28 PM

Awesome! I'm SOOOOOO Moved!!!!

~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.

BluesSerenade
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16 posted 2004-05-27 10:40 PM

leak or drown
piano keys ups and downs
waiting
waiting for the time and sound.

Such a moving, insightful, inspired bit of writing.

You do this so well, sweet Sadie~
Hat's off to you, along with so much admiration.

Mysteria

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17 posted 2004-05-27 11:03 PM

Absolutely awesome!  These lines hit me hard (kinda story of my life LOL)

Passion  there
But he worked too hard
At everything
Except
Me.
My soul I had to keep

You rose to that challenge extremely well - taking on Sunshine!  Great job.

Endlessecho
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18 posted 2004-05-28 08:21 AM

Thank you for sharing your heart with us.

It's beautiful.

Sunshine

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19 posted 2004-05-28 09:06 AM

Susan Caldwell
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20 posted 2004-05-28 09:44 AM

"leak or drown
piano keys ups and downs
waiting
waiting for the time and sound.

When it came,
the surprise was me
I sent him go,
I loved him so"

I loved the structure...perfection!

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Goodknight
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21 posted 2004-05-30 02:25 PM

Sadie - wow so powerfully written - so wonderfully well done - tough to let go of stuff like this but you did it well - Paul

GG
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22 posted 2004-05-30 02:33 PM

Boy am I glad for Sunshine!!
You don't have to do MORE MORE MORE about this.. just as long as you have more about something and fast! I was out a few days and need to go back and read what I missed still, but when I catch up? there'd better be a new poem or two waiting for me!
You write with the depth and detail to leave the reader in full knowledge of everything, but with just the right amount of wonder and question. Perfect!
Did I mention I like it?... err, I do

Always, Alyssa

Poems are made by fools like me,
But only God can make a tree.
Joyce kilmer

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