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A Cloud In The Heart Of Orion
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A Cloud In The Heart Of Orion |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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A Cloud In The Heart Of Orion You can still see blue between the stars, fathoms of ultramarine with floating diamonds, and in this quiet you can feel the shift as cool pacific air draws in from the sea, to find some comfort in the warmth of land. Orion’s in uniform, the pale cloud of stars hung at his belt as always, pressed and clean until, as if by plan another wisp of white fades in above those three straight stars. Only a cloud, beginning just there, and it spreads, takes slow shape, for a moment like a face, then a dog I think, fat, precious, and now it is a cloud again, fading, thinning, gone. Forming, we say of a cloud, taking shape, as if pure virgin water had been brought forth, only to make a God-print on the sky. It is not so. The water was already here, part of the very air, and it is here yet. It’s merely gone back to another form now, cloud spirit, no longer corporal but just as real. That’s how it is with spirit, here for a moment or what seems forever, then gone but present still. With instruments or eyes made for such things, I could see the vapor even now, confirm its existence with a scientific observation, easily as my eyes see other spirits when I ask it of them. But there is no need; I trust the water to be there as water always is, transparent until some slight and unseen change will bring it into view. See, it’s back already; now Orion has a heart. [This message has been edited by Ratleader (05-22-2004 11:13 AM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ratleader Vissions of the mind, enjoyed. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Interesting ponderings and lovely imagery.  ...jo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I LOVE poetry about constellations! Excellent! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Great write! Me too, I love to observe the clouds and interprete their forms. And stargazing too is part of the pleasure. Love, Margherita  |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
wow.....you are a fortunate man. you see what so many others miss as they speed along hoping to get to tomorrow. |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Forming, we say of a cloud, taking shape, as if pure virgin water had been brought forth, only to make a God-print on the sky. "It is not so. The water was already here, part of the very air, and it is here yet. It’s merely gone back to another form now, cloud spirit, no longer corporal but just as real. That’s how it is with spirit, here for a moment or what seems forever, then gone but present still." This concept has always interested me, too. You said it so eloquently! But the ending-stunning! Incredible thoughts and skill... Enjoyed, Sadie |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I was smiling even before I opened this poem... thinking of all the times I've watched Orion rise over my Dad's house... he is so beautiful against the velvet blackness where there's no competition from man-made light sources. *S* You can still see blue between the stars, fathoms of ultramarine with floating diamonds, and in this quiet you can feel the shift as cool pacific air draws in from the sea, to find some comfort in the warmth of land. Then I started reading... and your images are more vivid than even the dearest memories. *S* Forming, we say of a cloud, taking shape, as if pure virgin water had been brought forth, only to make a God-print on the sky. It is not so. The water was already here, part of the very air, and it is here yet. It’s merely gone back to another form now, cloud spirit, no longer corporal but just as real. That’s how it is with spirit, here for a moment or what seems forever, then gone but present still. And this... It's just magnificent!!! If you'd written nothing else, I'd be clicking the library button. *S* See, it’s back already; now Orion has a heart. So does the poet. *S* Absolutely beautiful work!! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
That’s how it is with spirit, here for a moment or what seems forever, then gone but present still. I got so lost in this before that I forgot to check the library box... I'm righting that omission now. *S* |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Marvelous write. Really enjoyed this one. JL She said: ”You look cute in the dark.” |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
My goodness this is beautiful !! Much enjoyed. Chris Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale. |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I think your short poetry can't be topped. And then I read a longer piece, like this one, and I change my mind again. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Ed, this is so beautiful. You painted a very beautiful picture with your words, kind Sir. Very good writing, Ed.  Hugs,  |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"Orion’s in uniform, the pale cloud of stars hung at his belt as always, pressed and clean until, as if by plan another wisp of white fades in above those three straight stars. Only a cloud, beginning just there, and it spreads, takes slow shape, for a moment like a face, then a dog I think, fat, precious, and now it is a cloud again, fading, thinning, gone." Some impressive writing here Ed, very much enjoyed...  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Different areas of the country offer different glimpses of nature...different aspects on nature; how varied our lives are if we only take a moment to look outside ourselves, as you have done. Kudos, Poet. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed You see with special eyes...it is a blessing to you, the poem, and the ones lucky enough to read it. |
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