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Open Poetry #32

Shadowed Rain

Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2004-05-19 01:54 PM

Thunder was out there,
Shaking the water out of the thick air,
Pelting his shadows,
Invading through the edges of his realm,
Tapping on windows
Changing them to a mud grim flowing film,
The puddle slow wet
Through the small holes in his second hand shoes,
Best shoes he could get
When there was nothing left in life to lose
Penny gone loafers
Covered his bare red and raw sock less feet,
Lost all endeavors
Nowhere new to go, no one else to meet
No one left to call
Even if he had the quarter to use,
Nothing left at all,
No choices of events were his to choose.
Somewhere was a plane
Winging away to a happy landing,
Here was only rain
And the puddle there in which he’s standing.

Gloom

Sadelite
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since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

1 posted 2004-05-19 02:05 PM

well written reality check; sometimes things are so poorly distributed...Enjoyed, but saddened.

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2004-05-19 02:23 PM

Professor,
Good mtaphors, enjoyed the read.

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

3 posted 2004-05-19 02:35 PM

Thank you, Sadelite,
Pleased you enjoyed my journey into the shadowed side of life

Thank you, Seymour,
Pleased you njoyed

Gloom

Decaflame
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since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

4 posted 2004-05-19 05:05 PM

Thunder was out there,
Shaking the water out of the thick air,
Pelting his shadows,

~*~

Instant imagery...
enjoyed this very much, Professor.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2004-05-20 02:41 AM

good write

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

6 posted 2004-05-20 05:34 AM

Penny gone loafers...(I like that)

I remember when they were all the rage...I wonder if when they were of no more use did everyone take out the coins or just toss them away with the shoes...

M

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