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Foxyoasis
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since 2003-06-10
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Atlantic Beach,Fla

0 posted 2004-05-19 11:27 AM



Sweet nothings whisper in
my mind of thoughts of
your tender kiss.

The embrace of your warmth
at night is something that
I really miss.

The impression on me
do you really know?
how ridiculous my mind
saids when I think of
love at first sight.

My heart is stupid once
again and fell for you
alright. turn the pages
set the clocks things will
come in place.

someday or sooner I hope
you feel the same.

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....


© Copyright 2004 Julie O'Neill - All Rights Reserved
Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
1 posted 2004-05-19 12:02 PM


Your longing was almost palpable. May that day you long for, come to pass.

Love & Light,
EA

JL
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since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
2 posted 2004-05-19 12:18 PM


Very nice.

JL

She said: ”You look cute in the dark.”


passing shadows
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displaced
3 posted 2004-05-19 12:45 PM


hard to have to wait, yes
majnu
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4 posted 2004-05-19 01:13 PM


the begining is cliche. however, you seemed to get more comfortable as you went on and the honesty and emotion came out - the second to last stanza was my favorite.

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
5 posted 2004-05-19 01:15 PM


I agree with Majnu....
This is very well done and appeared more relaxed part way through.
Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

Foxyoasis
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since 2003-06-10
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Atlantic Beach,Fla
6 posted 2004-05-19 02:02 PM


thanks guys yes I hope it comes out for me soon to.

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....


JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
7 posted 2004-05-19 08:20 PM


Every now and then a special one comes along...and we can only hope they are thinking the same about us...James
Foxyoasis
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since 2003-06-10
Posts 974
Atlantic Beach,Fla
8 posted 2004-05-19 08:32 PM


how true that very is,i hope they feel the same otherwise im going to be really bummed out. Love Stinks lol but look at all the nice poetry that came out of love and heartache got to look on the plus side right?

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....


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