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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Once cotton was steamed through iron's cheeks; Unhinged intimacy sweetly leaked Until fabric soul burnt open wide, It was singed; she cringed. Hence she wore summer cloth on wintry day airing pores to sweat that sun away; But fabric lattice slightly pressed against unsettled skin. Memory marks imprinted once again [This message has been edited by Sadelite (05-19-2004 02:14 PM).] |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Very deep and good! (But I still like the other one the best.)  [This message has been edited by iliana (05-19-2004 12:03 AM).] |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
yes deep and good. enjoyed |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
iliana, Yes, again it's deep. Depth is my curse! I just am unable to write freely about such things. Sadie MGroves, I appreciate your sweet response. Take care. Sadie |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Sadie -- I liked the changes. [This message has been edited by iliana (05-19-2004 02:17 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow... |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
"But fabric lattice slightly pressed against unsettled skin. Memory marks imprinted once again" Burning honesty woven into this....I'm glad I found it. Up it goes to the top, where it belongs! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
passing shadows, Wow is good! Thanks for the boost! Sadie Ratleader, It was great to hear from you again. I'm glad you liked those lines; they were my favorite. Take care. Sadie |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Such incredible imagery in this... excellent write!! |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
suthern, You're kindness is greatly appreciated. It's great to hear from you. Thank you. Sadie [This message has been edited by Sadelite (05-21-2004 09:52 PM).] |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
I have lots of memory marks -- but I've a feeling none of them look quite as good on me as yours do on you.... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sadie, my gal... your poetry leaks feelings... I have a bit more understanding now... go for the real of it... go for the feel of it don't pull any punches, y'hear? |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
very interesting...different. my.... this forum has grownup since I left 4 years ago. |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
James, I don't know about that...but thanks for the flattery! (Make-up does wonders!) Enjoyed your response, Jaime. Sadie Sunshine, You're right about that-it does leak! There are little holes that I haven't wanted to mend. Afraid. Sunshine, I'm not ready to go for the real of it and erase those very old memory marks, but I'll try. Thanx. Sadie Robert, I'm glad you found it interesting. Pip continues to grow; I've been here since October and I can't keep up with the new names. So much talent here... Glad you decided to come back. I'm looking forward to reading your poems. Sadie [This message has been edited by Sadelite (05-23-2004 01:10 AM).] |
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