Open Poetry #32 |
What the Mortician Did |
Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
What the Mortician Did He molds flesh with soft hands; does a little death jig, a dance. Sickles snag my attention, twin crescents of moonlit reflection: eyes with steel-flecked retinas, cold stainless surfaces rolling in sockets as hands lovingly slide over skin. A sluice is pried open, the body hisses. My thoughts hover: he’s dancing with a dead woman. Later, a dress is ripped open in the back and tucked beneath indifferent flesh. I can’t see the color, but I know it’s navy-and-white. If my lips weren’t sewn shut, I’d bitch about being buried in stripes. [This message has been edited by Corinne (05-17-2004 06:43 PM).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW Unbelievable...sitting here with the biggest grin in awe of you Corinne... Jeez I was thinking about morticians only yesterday. keeping it. Maree The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I've been watching too many CSI's... this is way too real... therefore, a |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
*blinking in awe* sooo much liked this |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
This was an attention grabber! It kept me spell bound until the end, where you tripped me up-I didn't expect it to be you. Awesome and somewhat chilling write. Sadie |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
intense! |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Almost opposite the opening scene of "The big chill" This, I find chilling...Great poem though. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corinne~ Sometimes you surprise even me ! *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I'm not much on dark poems -- but your writing is amazing! |
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Endlessecho Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 398I live within myself |
haha. dark yet humerous. Intense and riveting. You have an interesting mind. ;-) |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
You had me there..right up until the end... M |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Chilling! But good read. JL She said: ”You look cute in the dark.” |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very intense and chilling write Corinne. Loved the twist at the end. Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
i found this funny yet morbid. maybe the feelings should have been in the opposite order but oh well. nice. -majnu -------------------------------------- Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet. |
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Defective Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 73Salisbury NC |
Ugh. Stripes. Just like a man to not care what they do to your figure. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thanks everyone! A bit of a twisted write. Was setting down to write something serious about death, but this is what came out! Corinne |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
more posts please |
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Triskaidekaphobia Member
since 2003-02-05
Posts 251In a state of disrepair... |
Twisted? Yes Weird? Yes My kind of poem? YES!!!!! "And the sun went down, and the stars came out far over the summer sea, |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
wow, intense... Morbid and funny, That's my kinda stuff! I like it! Always, Alyssa Poems are made by fools like me, |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I echo Raph....more posts please! The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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