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BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

0 posted 2004-05-30 11:21 PM

~*~

The space we carved no longer allures me to fill.
Still, I trace my fingers across the markings
smoothing over an unfinished dream.
Like private etchings that never came to life,
whittle away over time

And in my heart of hearts
I always knew you wouldn't stay at the first sign of breaking away.
You were neither my friend or my lover
but an artist at work,
lacking true color.

However, I am grateful you didn't gloss me over,
or leave a coat of polish to rub in.
Pretending;
there was more to us,
when there wasn't.

~*~

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

1 posted 2004-05-30 11:26 PM

WOW...

However, I am grateful you didn't gloss me over,
or leave a coat of polish to rub in.
Pretending;
there was more to us,
when there wasn't.

Love it! Lori...

Mxx

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

2 posted 2004-05-31 12:40 PM

I'll get over the blues, one of these days.
Thanks a bunch for reading, Maree~

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

3 posted 2004-05-31 01:09 AM

"You were neither my friend or my lover
but an artist at work,
lacking true color."

I've known of a few "artists" in my day, too...I might put a con in front of that, too! lol... No, really, great poem!

...jo

[This message has been edited by iliana (05-31-2004 04:26 PM).]

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

4 posted 2004-05-31 02:17 AM

It's a hard balance to strike, bluesgirl....take it from one who tries. Be patient with the guy -- he's probably trying too, but reduced to clinging to the wire instead of walking it.

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CastleGuard
Senior Member

since 2003-04-30

Posts 760
Alberta, Canada

5 posted 2004-05-31 02:28 AM

"...but an artist at work,
lacking true color."

But, as one who prefers to work in the 'shade', shall not feel the warmth of the Sun on his face...

CG

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

6 posted 2004-05-31 02:46 AM

understanding this

Aimster
Member Elite

since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

7 posted 2004-05-31 08:19 AM

beautiful Lori...as always you
have a way of touching me deep
within...sad write, but had such
strength to it. enjoyed this very
much!
take care

Amy

"When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter"

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

8 posted 2004-05-31 09:55 AM

However, I am grateful you didn't gloss me over,
or leave a coat of polish to rub in.
Pretending;
there was more to us,
when there wasn't.

I really feel this piece Bluesylady.
Hugs, Chris

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

9 posted 2004-05-31 11:19 AM

"You were neither my friend or my lover
but an artist at work,
lacking true color."

~ It is a good thing, Lori, that your artist's eye discerned that his canvas lacked luster! He sounded as tho' he'd paint you blue...

To Bright Colours ~ and bright men!
Paint your skies with rainbows!

Linda

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

10 posted 2004-05-31 03:33 PM

"You were neither my friend or my lover
but an artist at work,
lacking true color."

Very cool (if painful) lines Bluesy. It won't last forever...

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

11 posted 2004-05-31 03:54 PM

Very, very well written. The second stanza is my favorite, I'm sorry for your pain, but perhaps it is better if this person did not appreaciate the beauty in you.

~Live and Laugh~

The memories are worth the pain when the happiness is outweighs the sorrow
~Bella~

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

12 posted 2004-05-31 04:24 PM

Bluesy,
As artists go you use a lot of color. And you get "write" to the heart of things. I hurt when I read but it helps me understand. Here's to better days...

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

13 posted 2004-05-31 04:33 PM

Always come away with a clearer picture from your works...nicely done.
TD

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

14 posted 2004-05-31 04:34 PM

Bluesy, I don't know why but the following just popped into my mind after reading your words - "Forgive them for they know not what they do".

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

15 posted 2004-06-01 03:08 PM

I always take a deep breath before I read one of yours... knowing the powerful truths you write will knock it right out of me. *S*

Robert Frazier
Senior Member

since 2003-02-06

Posts 1014

16 posted 2004-06-01 05:23 PM

"Pretending; there was more to us, when there wasn't." well said, it simply aches.

Rf

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

17 posted 2004-06-01 05:48 PM

"However, I am grateful you didn't gloss me over,
or leave a coat of polish to rub in.
Pretending;
there was more to us,
when there wasn't."

Wow Bluesy....I know this feeling well.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

18 posted 2004-06-01 10:52 PM

pretending.........
o dear girl.............you have my heart alongside of yours

tonight
big blonde hugs to u

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