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Cleft for Me
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Cleft for Me |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Beat with your rattle Bash me with your cane Stab me with wit I’m almost driven insane Spread me on the “Rock of Ages” Crash me with a stoning Leave me so battered, Mumbling and moaning Listen to baby prattle Twelve two year olds Till I’m spasmodic Then toss me to the summer’s cold To run in mindless rages Vacillating through emotion That doesn’t really matter Repeating conversation Repeating conversation Repeating Repeating Repeat Re R Gloom |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
pretty cool write love the format |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
You doin' daycare Gloomy? Hee hee...this is pretty cool. TD |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Gee, Cleft is different... I liked this--it does sound like someone had nursery duty and "may have" survived it, or scribed this with fingernails on the walls. I chuckle as I've been there!!! Enjoyed the intensity and format. Sadie [This message has been edited by Sadelite (05-18-2004 09:52 AM).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Gloom I taught preschool for 30 years...this sounds very familiar. Well done feel of desperation here.  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
lol -- perfect!  .......jo |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Twelve two year olds?? I would rather have dry socket... "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
I like this, I like it a whole, whole lot, YOU darling one have exceptional talent and when you write, whatever you write you simply excel. I love it utterly utterly utterly as always Mushy    Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds but I can face the future with courage brave and bold Footprints In My Heart Kethry |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
hmmm, is it preschool, sunday school maybe? this piqued my interest |
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time prophet Member
since 2003-07-30
Posts 371In New Zealand Amongst the Ancient Trees |
Sounds like someone had to look after the grandchildren. |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
I read this again and got an entirely different meaning! If I read it right, there is a lot more than meets the eye. Either way, the activity in this one creates terrific imagery and intensity. Different for you. I liked. Sadie |
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