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VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2004-05-15 12:33 PM

A Cliched Life?
salt, no matter how ordinary, seasons
(after seeing Magnus’ title “ABottle Cast upon the Sea,”
I was inspired to write the following. Now I will go read
his piece.)

a bottle tossed
into the foam
may be trite
at its best
but put to the test

could there be
anything more poetic
than the bobbing-
aimlessly-
“going with the flow”
to and fro,
letting the tide
lift and carry it
to its destiny

one thing certain
a container
that retains its cork,
its air, its breath of life,
will not capsize
in the roughest of seas

may You
always be
my Cork for me
endlessly

©May 15, 2004

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2004-05-15 01:04 PM

yeah, he does inspire just with a few words

good write here...enjoyed

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

2 posted 2004-05-15 01:41 PM

Bravo!! Like it, you have done well with
your own thoughts of this...Thanx Virginia.

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

3 posted 2004-05-15 01:44 PM

Very nicely put. Great write.

JL

She said: ”You look cute in the dark.”

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

4 posted 2004-05-16 01:20 AM

Very cool~

Really nice inspire, VAS~

Beki
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1569
Newport Beach, CA, USA

5 posted 2004-05-16 06:40 AM

"a container
that retains its cork,
its air, its breath of life,
will not capsize
in the roughest of seas

may You
always be
my Cork for me
endlessly"

what a lovely and original thought

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

6 posted 2004-06-13 08:45 AM

wow, the ending is thought-provoking and sweet!

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

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Tamarac Fla

7 posted 2004-06-13 09:21 AM

VAS
Good thoughts, good write, good read.

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

8 posted 2004-06-13 12:03 PM

I love this -- may you be my cork -- great!

Susan

The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart.

Kevo
Member

since 2004-06-02

Posts 466
Navarro County, Texas, USA

9 posted 2004-06-13 01:28 PM

This was posted before my "Born-On Date" so I missed it but now have caught up with it. It is a great poem with a very real, very profound message. I thoroughly enjoyed it and hope others read it. In my mind there are layers in this short poem one that comes out most of all is a message of hope. A message of riding out the most wicked storms. Rolling with the rise and fall of troubled, or tranuil seas. Thank you for the posting it.

Kevin

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

10 posted 2004-06-13 07:04 PM

Wonderful write, VAS!

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

11 posted 2004-06-13 07:15 PM

Virginia

As the others have said...Well done!

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