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A Bottle Cast Upon The Sea
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A Bottle Cast Upon The Sea |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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A bottle cast upon the sea now bobbles ever lazily against the swell and rising tide in search a place to lie, not hide. A wish within, a written thought a wonder what might then be caught A moment’s scrawl on page within in search a place to lay again. O ride the foam and cresting wave across the oceans wide and brave and find one home to then reside no longer lost in bobbling hide. The words within carved delicate upon thin sheets a predicate of love once found and twice then lost upon the foam of oceans tossed. O ride the foam and cresting wave a trek alone yet bobbling brave As currents push the lonely flask in efforts gentle a bottles task. And when the day shall come to be upon the rolling mighty sea. A love shall read and softly cry of words within before they die. For bottles bobble alone the wave in search the heart of waiting brave alone upon the foam frothed peak in search the heart of maiden seek. [This message has been edited by Magnus (05-15-2004 12:49 PM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Now bobble will be in my brain all day...  thanks for the enjoyable read, Magnus. [get yourself to announcements, ok?] |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
 love this, the flow,the sentiment..it all sang perfectly...very nice  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful wonderful write Barry! ~Smiles, Hugs, & W.S.~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry I love the whole idea of a message in a bottle...so romantic....and your poem told it so well! Sending  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Magnus You did it agsin, wonderful write. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Love the "foam-frothed pead" phrase!!! Love the rhythm of this, too! I do believe you want "lie" not "lay" for "lay" is past tense. Hope you don't mind me "taking off" with a poem after reading the title of this one...I couldn't contain myself! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Magical surfs always token the thoughts to their rightful home... Wonderful song. TD |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
beautiful |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Beautiful...as always. Eric |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Pure perfection, Mag. I am envious of your meter, smoothness, and your ability to choose the perfect words. And you know what, my friend? Just when I think you can't get any better. You do! So wonderful to read you again! Patricia |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I smiled when I saw the title to this one, seems we have something in common Message In A Bottle A message in a bottle Upon the open sea Set to sail some years ago Found its way to me Upon the open sea Where winds and currents play Its course so unpredictable It came to rest one day Where winds and currents play ‘Midst waves, storms and debris Left to the deep blue oceans whims It found its way to me ‘Midst waves, storms and debris It washed upon the shore The message in a bottle Sent several years before It washed upon the shore The letter safe and dry And when I started reading it I couldn’t help but cry The letter safe and dry It told a haunting tale “My dearest Ruth...” it began My breath caught, my face went pale It told a haunting tale In writing I knew well He promised he’d come back real soon The day that he set sail In writing I knew well I read his final note He’d run into a storm at sea Where the waves they’d sunk his boat I read his final note A letter meant for me “I know I promised I’d be back But it seems I’ll die at sea” A letter meant for me “Please forgive me,” the words said “I won’t be coming back to you By tomorrow I’ll be dead” “Please forgive me,” the words said “You know I loved you so But I’ve drifted here for days on end And now it’s time to go” “You know I loved you so My dear I always will When I shed this mortal shell I will love you still” “My dear I always will Remember our true love I’m looking forward to the day When we both meet above” “Remember our true love” How those words they spoke to me As I shoved the note into the bottle And threw it out to sea How those words they spoke to me There standing on that shore I’d thought he found another love Those many years before There standing on the shore As I began to cry I watched the bottle drift away And finally said goodbye ~ Ruth |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Magnus~ Such a lovely read this evening~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
very nice -beki applauds heartily! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You certainly lent your creative and romantic touch to this write. It has you written all over it! ~ and that's a "mag"nificent thing!  Linda |
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