Open Poetry #32 |
As Grain Falls |
Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
A grazing touch of memory. Of times too short, too long ago. Opinions aired, courageously of what they might but did not know. A lifetime lived, a last breath left to fog the glass of past recall. A springtime song as mem’ries slept and sadness fell in teardrop’s fall. Upon the thorny stem a bud born fresh to bloom and catch an eye. As thorns do prick and draw one’s blood and angels soar the cloudless sky. Death is but our release of life when who we were is laid to rest. No longer pained or wrought with strife, as all was gave, a human’s best. Too soon the scythe does fell the crop Too soon the seed does tumble down. Too soon the unwound watch then stops the faltering soft tick’s rebound. And though I trek uncharted earth and stumble as a pebble rolls. A new young life shall soon be born the meadow low as two bells toll. At birth to wake and smell the rose upon the winding vine of life. Where age and wisdom slowly grows until the silent scything knife. [This message has been edited by Magnus (05-14-2004 07:03 PM).] |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Such excellent poetry. Enjoyed the read. JL She said: ”You look cute in the dark.” |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Barry -- and the seed falls, and grows, and enriches us, and shows beauty, as did this lovely, sad reflection. jo |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Barry, these are beautiful reflections upon the cycle of life. Looking back always makes us think that life is just like a lightning ... Breathing deeply in the Now still gives joy and meaning to everything. But melancholy can't be totally avoided, our hearts are soft, after all. Excellent write. Love, Margherita |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful beautiful write Barry... A pleasure to read you once again sir. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
There is music in this life tale, there is magic in your rhythm and flow. I would change this like though "on the mirror of past recall." maybe to "upon the glass of past recall" because it seems your metre is a little trochee. *Grin. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry You know I think you very! |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Without you I might never have seen this far... TD |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Magnus~ Touching ... touching~ 'A lifetime lived, a last breath left to fog the glass of past recall. A springtime song as mem’ries slept and sadness fell in teardrop’s fall.' Oh, yes~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
gawd! I love it when you rhyme! |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Don't know how I missed this one before. Your words are always eloquent and full of such wisdom. I'm having a hard time coming up with favorite lines because I like it all so much. So you'll have to do with know I love it all and I'm keeping it in my library... Always, Alyssa Poems are made by fools like me, |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Barry what a very fine write..great ryme and flowed well..thank you... Goldenrose. Barry if i may draw your attention to my posts in annoucements and links about the 60th anniversary of the dday landings...i have wriiten poems in remembrance of the allied forces..i am sure that you could write something...let us show that we appreciated the sacrifice...thank you... Goldenrose. ''There is no need for temples, no need for complicated Philosophies. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
elegant yes and a joy to read |
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