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"Dream up a Heaven for Me" |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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"Dream up a heaven for me." - But how do you combine Silence with a Rube Goldberg sketch? Instead, I painted Blue around a square of Nothingness; paisley & plaid, penguins and polar bears. Wrapped like the border in a child's room, I encased her memory in the Perception of Security... Oh, & Happiness too, I suppose. Never one to dodge a dare, it might not have meant much to her, but helped me to Sleep better at night. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Christopher Reminds me of long ago. Enjoyed |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I encased her memory in the Perception of Security... Oh, & Happiness too, I suppose. Whatever gets you through the night! Really nice, Christopher~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful Christopher...much enjoyed reading you today. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ To have lived the dream of a love so true... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Nice to see you here Christopher...sometimes what gives us peace is enough...heres to peaceful slumbers  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
there you are! I dug you up in poetry 1 glad you are back and in form! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
First, thanks for the prompt to look up rube goldberg. I wasn't familiar, and honestly, I don't think I could have understood the poem without that understanding. A clever and thoughtful write, m'bud. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Wonderful Christopher, it's nice to read you again. Maree Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Good one! |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Never one to dodge a dare," ...in that case....   |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It's a good feeling, knowing I've adopted you...  And this? Quite telling, young man, quite! Not even here yet, and already has you wrapped around that littlest finger...  |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
enjoyed  |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
I knew a guy who wrote poetry about me........ and songs too........ Its not that I pushed him aside or didn't care. I cared very much. I couldn't reach him. I panicked. anxiety. just a thought. Juju |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
What's with all the capitals? Alarm! Alarm! No nononononono C, no. Please, no. I know you love your abstractions - I remember French Surrealism affected your writing and I still see it here. This doesn't work for me, though. This is, to me, out there with no thread tying the piece together. Does that make any sense? I suppose you might say 'but I intended it that way.' And if you do, I would ask you - and do you think it's working? I like some of the images: I painted Blue around a square of Nothingness; paisley & plaid, penguins and polar bears. Wrapped like the border in a child's room, That in particular. K |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
"I encased her memory in the Perception of Security... Oh, & Happiness too, I suppose." this is a great way to make tangible a feeling very hard to describe enjoyed |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
I intended it that way. you knew I was going to say that, didn't you? i also think it DID work... and will explain why later, when i can muster up some more time. thanks to all who replied. C |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Sadly, yes, I knew. I look forward to your justification... smile |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Hi Christoper, well, it certainly worked for me...loved this especially... I painted Blue around a square of Nothingness; paisley & plaid, penguins and polar bears. Wrapped like the border in a child's room, I encased her memory in the Perception of Security... absoulety gets your feelings across to the reader...love the abstracts in all of your writings....hugs...Lee J. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
quote:First, k, I have to ask if you're at all familiar with Rube Goldberg? He dealt in irony indeed... and could easily be referred to as a surrealistic inventor. What he would do, is take everyday occurences (for example, dialing a phone) or situational bits (dodging the "tax man") and create a way for them to be "simplified." The simplification, however, was in truth the exact opposite... and wholly unlikely - if not impossible. A hook on a passerbys' hat startles a canary, who squawks, causing a nearby cat to perk up, scaring a mouse who is in a cage in the pet store, causing it to run on it's wheel, which is connected to a reel with rope attached to it which is drawn in, thus opening the door. I'm not sure if this really helps explain... it needs to be open-ended. As with Rube, the 'fun' isn't in the tying up of threads, but rather, in the knots. As to the caps... don't worry; it's like working on Saturday... something I hate to do, but have to once in a great while. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
stunning blue.... good to see you posting ~~**~~ |
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forne_marin Member
since 2004-04-13
Posts 140Spartanburg, South Carolina |
Okay, first off I have to say how thrilled I was to find someone who's style seems so close to mine. I'm definately going to have to add you to my library and go back and check out some of your older posts. I thoroughly enjoyed this piece. I believe the most important component of a poem is rhythm. Rhythm is the heartbeat of a poem. It is what makes poetry poetry. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
nodding... Understanding "rube" was the key to the whole point of the poem. I finally "got" it. yay me... grin. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Enjoyed the experiment with style and its explaination as well |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"As with Rube, the 'fun' isn't in the tying up of threads, but rather, in the knots." Exactly...enjoyed this C.  |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
I liked the words and ideas here very much. clever |
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the romantic fanatic Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 26Spokane, WA U.S.A. |
Can you explain all this to me...um I think I understand what you mean. Funny how seemingly unrelated items, objects and events can link a chain of events together in, again, a seemingly unrelated or random order to create or perpetuate causality and occurance. Or have I missed the point? About Rube, I mean. You are another story, Christopher. I liked it. Very well done. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well aren't I the weird one, reminded me of a story of a Mom (guess because of what today is?) However, back to Rube - I love his way of thinking which kinda like my entire life and mind, (my head works that way in series from one event onto the next in sequence,) ask anyone who knows me I really, really liked it Chris, and look forward to your next attempt at this style. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Totally precious! ....jo |
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