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The Weight of Echoes
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The Weight of Echoes |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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The Weight of Echoes Birds of echoes flying west Filled my mind a pregnant nest And I am thatched with food for thought But cannot hatch what echoes brought They filigree a Christmas tree To large for me to fully see And I am lost in awe of light With stars that dazzle me their sight I cannot fit the total rhyme Into the given set of time Nor can I fit the total goal Into my small pathetic soul I wonder in the echoes fall Send some back from whence they call The rest I study for rapport To catch the echoes evermore But echoes bounce around the bend And never seem to really end |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
" cannot fit the total rhyme Into the given set of time Nor can I fit the total goal Into my small pathetic soul" and yet your wonder shines, m'friend... you are my morning smile.  a top o the mornin' to you, and hey? gimme that hug!  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
But echoes bounce around the bend And never seem to really end Hmm, no they don't do they, sometimes I really wish they would. A wonderful write Seymour, loved the rhyme and flow. Maree Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Sometimes the weight of echos can be much heavier than the sound from wence they came |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
A fine write Seymour...especialy the part with echoing birds..i love to see birds flying...thank you.. Goldenrose. ''There is no need for temples, no need for complicated Philosophies. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ Wonderful~ Wonderful~ Wonderful~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, You're a sweet bit of candle yourself. Dark Angel Glad you agree. hoot, Yes an echoes weight will vary, thank for the read. Goldenrose, Thank you for the read and comment. Marge, Hugs and  sss |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Seymour, I would rename your poem, because instead of a weight, the echoes you captured touch our hearts with the softness of a feather .... This is absolutely delightful. You overflow with beauty. Love and hugs. Margherita |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Margherita, And you overflow with sweetness. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
And I am thatched with food for thought But cannot hatch what echoes brought ~~~~ I cannot fit the total rhyme Into the given set of time Nor can I fit the total goal Into my small pathetic soul ===================================== SO--youre writing fiction now???  Birds of echoes flying west Filled my mind a pregnant nest ~~~~~ They filigree a Christmas tree To large for me to fully see And I am lost in awe of light With stars that dazzle me their sight ya write lines like that and then say you cant make the rhyme fit, cant hatch the thought??? OH me thinks you do just fine Sy-babers...me thinks even your echos have cadence.  *ww*  ... and it's you ... you ... you ... you ... the light changes when you're in the room. M.B. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
ooh, I like this very much... the idea of echoes having weight and most profoundly love the first stanza!!!  ***SUPERB*** Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, You have just made a poor man rich. WWRS VAS Superb, you flatter me, LOL but I thank you. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
To borrow one of Sunshine's phrases (with apologies but could not resist the temptation) -- Seymour, "eggsactly" (with the caveat that I do not believe you have a pathetic soul for one moment)! ...jo |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Lovely lovely rhyme today Sy... Loved the flow and much enjoyed the theme. ~Afternoon hugs to you m'friend~ To have lived the dream of a love so true... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
ah good afternoon Sy wonderful piece...last lines are incredible |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
iliana "eggsactly" LOL thank you. Nancy, Hugs and ssspassing, Thank you sweety. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy The thought of weight of echos...WIHTOT...is wonderful...and the poem that came from it. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I cannot fit the total rhyme Into the given set of time Nor can I fit the total goal Into my small pathetic soul Seymour, your rhymes are always perfect to me. Always!! Hugs, Ethel |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie Hugs and ss backEthel Hugs and ss to you too. |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Seymour, this was truly wonderful and so very very much enjoyed, thank you so much for sharing your talent through words my friend. Sincerely Rick |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Seymour...Enjoyed this very much. Food for thought. Thanks for sharing...Paul |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Rick Thank you for the read and reply Paul Glad you enjoyed, thanks for the read. |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Your poem was interesting. I liked it. -Juju |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sy, long ago you posted a poem called "The Golden Key" I've kept it, all these years... I am going to put this along side that one... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Juju Glad you liked, thank you Sunshine, I'll have to see if I can find that again. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Sy, this is terrific. TD |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Seymour A fabulous writing that was so inspiring. Take care.....Sue I am in motion |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
ThisDiamond I thank you for the read and reply. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Oh, my goodness! You most definitely do not have a "small pathetic soul", Dear Apollo! You radiate the sun in galactic proportions and your words are of such import that they echo forevermore throughout the Universe!  Loves 'n hugs, EA |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Earth Angel So you really are an Angel. |
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