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This Ghost In Me
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This Ghost In Me |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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I know the verses are long in this piece but the music is quite bouncy and fast but still with a haunting melody....(Pun intended) . . . . . When I think about her now and it gets me feeling down I convince myself there's no one else I'd rather be around So I try to hide my thoughts Cause I know you care a lot I disguise my mood when I'm with you But inside I'm still lost Even though she stood me up N' I should know enough's enough My heart keeps changing no explaining how the mem'ries chew me up so I stare off into space and you see it in my face but you just can't replace....this ghost in me....... It seems just like yesterday I was happy in every way Looking forward to dreams come true and the role I was gonna play But reality came round turned my world upside down And without so much as a wish good luck She flew out of town Leaving me to doubt If I could ever work things out Till you came along like a brand new song and turned my hopes about Now I know your love exists and you know I honor it But I'm stuck livin with....this ghost in me..... I wish there was a way to break free from my own heart and to mend it You'd have all my attention And there'd be no mention of this ghost in me. The other day I saw the tears You tried to hide with cheer And I had to cry down deep inside Never wishing to cause you fear But at the bottom of my soul I know I've got a ways to go To be that man that'll take your hand for the distance down the road But I'll stay here with your heart And hope you don't depart While I ride this compromise that's tearing me apart just waiting for the day When the past will pass away you'll finally replace....this ghost in me..... Ain't doin nothin at all Just answerin the call Kinda driftin away from it all~~~~~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
ethome That's not a ghost it's a phantom and they can be dealt with. Good write enjoyed the read. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
so I stare off into space and you see it in my face but you just can't replace....this ghost in me....... love the rhythm...the rhyme and the meaning *s M |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yep...sending this one to my brother, as well. I hope to introduce the two of you to each other very soon, Eric.  |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
How honest and gentle these lines...affirming in their own way. Very well done. TD |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I know about these ghosts great song, I can only imagine the music |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Great write -- I'd love to hear the tune! ....jo |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Enjoyed your lyrics and rhythm-- would love to hear the song! This left a bitter sweet feel...one that lingers. Sadie |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
ethome...Anyone ever tell you that you are damn good? Well I guess they have now.LOL I really got into this song. Thanks for sharing...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
wish there was a way to break free from my own heart and to mend it You'd have all my attention And there'd be no mention of this ghost in me. ======================= its always such a treat to read your harmonies and rock in your roll  Another bluesy beauty from your gifted pen groovy guy. Awesome tune E-babes  I love you more the further I go ... |
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Fagin Member
since 2004-05-07
Posts 126Ca |
Good wok. I'd like to hear the tracks.. My Sis (sunshine) sent it to me. Id like to hear it... Well done! Robert Rilling |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Hey there Eric~ so wonderfully done, I'd love to hear the music behind this....good to see you...  ~~**~~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sy Thanks for the read and the response. I appreciate the comments and yes, I believe they can be dealt with. Maureen Thanks for droppin in and for the meaning and rythum comments. Much appreciated! Eric Ain't doin nothin at all |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Karilea Thanks for the kind words and for the delivery to your brother....I appreciate your kindnerss. TD Hey it's always good to hear from you. Thanks for the read and the response. Eric Ain't doin nothin at all |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
well done |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Dear Troubadour, a painful past does have a way of passing away! ~ and thank goodness for that! EA |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Excellent! JL She said: ”You look cute in the dark.” |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Hope she does stick around! Nicely written, Ethome! And it does sing! Corinne |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Fagin Nice to meet you. After the process of putting this into music I will email it to Sunshine and make sure you get it.....Always good to meet a fellow musician... Eric Ain't doin nothin at all |
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