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Forever Green and a Little Risky (response to muted's challenge)
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Forever Green and a Little Risky (response to muted's challenge) |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Leaves stayed on trees Always verdant. Never did they fall or stray Or in wind become child’s racing play. Fell they not on ground Orange red or dressed in golden brown; No leaves raked in circle round For young hearts to jump and bound. Never had they had the crave To leave the mother tree Never had they faith to see Where they could go, what they could be, the warming coal upon the night, a glow from within the Earth, a diamond bright They didn’t know if flung together They’d grace the earthen floor. In their brown, they’d crunch and hatch To be not one, but a hundred pieces more. Not a wind could tease them to take a path to detach selves from oaken branch; Leaves could not kiss the soil or bathe in their sunlit oil. No rainbows in puddles, No shelter for Easter egg No swishing sound in the woods No leaves to beg notice of their colorful range. No Autumn to fall upon starving artist. But as always, there’s at least one rebel in the crew That is a little pesty and a little risky A little drunken on life and maybe a little whiskey Who explores beyond the tree Splattering soft energy and Fall color upon a tapestry. [This message has been edited by Sadelite (04-17-2004 12:45 PM).] |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
That little one sounds a lot like me.? |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
iliana, (Read muted's challenge on the discussion page) Take care. uhgs, Sade |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
ughs to you, too, sis! lol! I re-read the poem after reading Muted's challenge. The last verse said it all. Still makes sense to me versus the rest of the family, though, in many ways, being that I was the one that tumbled off.  |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Yes you did and are blowing creatively in the wind. Thanks for checking out into this. Sade |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sade A lovely personification...and wonderful poem. |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Thank you very much Martie. It was inspired by Muted. Her words touched me. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
WOW SADIE!! wow  tears in my eyes, this is gorgeous!!! speechless here |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
I really enjoyed this -- quite lovely. I especially liked the ending. Susan |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Susan, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I liked the ending best, too. I like to try to find the positive in things "most" of the time. There is too little time to be down in the dumps. Thank you for reading and kind response. Sade |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
muted, This is yours to make changes as you'd like. I wrote it for you but may give it to someone from my church, also. You have such grace with words to change it if a thought is incomplete or inappropriate, I'm sure you'll make it right. Good luck. If you do, I'd love to see the new version. I'm sure it would be a beaut! Sade [This message has been edited by Sadelite (04-17-2004 10:11 AM).] |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
I would never change a single word..never.. i would steal away its essence one letter at a time in doing so...and i dont want to lose a drop of you...you created this beauty..you will live on in every single word of it... there is nothing i can do that will improve upon perfection.Thank you for everything |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
What profound beauty in this piece. Truly captivating and touching. Your heart listened well! Love and hugs. Margherita |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
muted, thank you for your kindness. Good luck to you. I hope this will be of some help. Sade Margherita, You are more than generous in your comments. I appreciate your words and thoughts. Thank you, Sade |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
This one is not to be missed, though I somehow missed it the first time around. Profoundly beautiful, it offered me a perspective today that wasn't on my palette yesterday. Thank you so much. |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Kacy, You're so very welcome. I don't know what perspective that might be, but I hope it is helpful. I truly appreciate you and all you give to color my palette and those of others. You have shown us true grace through tough times. Hang in there! We love you. a great big hug to you, Cathy |
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