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Kristin Eve
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since 2004-01-13

Posts 89
On, Canada

0 posted 2004-02-09 01:19 AM

Naked

The dancing skin on my weakening thighs
My breathy weeping and short, muttered cries
The craving and yearning I’ve grown to despise…

This is all happening because

The quivering chills that flirt with my spine
The soft, secret prayers for you to be mine
The red, haunting dreams that burn in my mind…

I’ve lifted the blanket off the cage

The weakness I feel when I melt in your eyes
The surrender inside that my mind denies
To know that acceptance could be my demise…

And now I’m exposing myself

The movement my heart makes in both awe and fear
The tempo of music whenever you’re near
The sweet harmony I can both feel and hear…

For the first time, and It’s like I’m…

To dabble with feelings so hard to refrain
To light spark into fire, and burn love once again
To let ‘secret me’ out and let ‘old me’ remain…

Naked.

…Is to stand here naked without going insane.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
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1 posted 2004-02-09 02:17 AM

awesome format! great piece!

Kristin Eve
Member

since 2004-01-13

Posts 89
On, Canada

2 posted 2004-02-09 11:06 AM

Thank you passing shadows...

this poem is very personal, and i was nervous about sharing it.

"By the time you finish reading this...
You will have finished readding this"

Grover
Senior Member

since 2004-01-27

Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada

3 posted 2004-02-09 12:16 PM

Very nice... "I’ve lifted the blanket off the cage." Excellent use of metaphors! Grover.

Endlessecho
Member

since 2003-09-05

Posts 398
I live within myself

4 posted 2004-02-09 12:24 PM

This is so well-written. The metaphors are very good, but the honesty especially shines through. You certainly captivated your feelings here. Well done.

Rdz9
Member

since 2003-03-16

Posts 142
MT, USA

5 posted 2004-02-09 12:30 PM

Wow... Enjoyed.
-Rdz

One in a sea of millions has the power to change the world...

Kristin Eve
Member

since 2004-01-13

Posts 89
On, Canada

6 posted 2004-02-14 03:47 AM

once again, thank you for your support. this poem is very special to me.

"By the time you finish reading this...
You will have finished readding this"

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

7 posted 2004-02-14 09:11 AM

Kristin Eve - I could sense that this was personal when reading, but at times it's good to share...

BC

Sadelite
Member Elite

since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

8 posted 2004-02-14 09:15 AM

Kristin,
   Very well expressed.  What can I say?
lots of passion in this!  Much enjoyed.
             Sadelite

Kicking Kim
Member

since 2001-04-16

Posts 426
Cloud Cucko Land!

9 posted 2004-02-14 09:34 AM

^*And now I'm exposing myself*^

What a wonderful and scary thought all at once!! This was a lovely poem and it really depicted your sense of shyness versus your inner confidence. Brilliant!!

**We've all been there**

^*Kim*^

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