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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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she stole the tinsel from the tree for the sake of modesty gathering her audience lidded lush imaginings charleston and a cigarette ruby lips a letter "o" impatience in dismiss of it flash of flask too delicate shivering the crawl of fringe teasing tiny hairs of thigh with more than her fair share of sass-- "c'mon daddy-o let's fly" She knew a secret place to hide-- beneath the bare of skin. [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (02-07-2004 12:06 AM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (giggles) This has a tinge of sadness to me but couldn't help but make me smile as it reminded me so much of the new age Betty Boops, sweet friend, hehehe, sugar and spice and ambrosia in one, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Serenity -- this was really good! |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
You provoked memories of perfume heavy with floral scents threaded with ambergris, tobacco smoke, rye whiskey, the shimmer of tiny sequins netted over smooth warm skin, flashing eyes and flashing beads, a teasing playful flick of tongue on the lips, and always in the background the brilliant sound of a slightly out of tune piano. ...and I thought I was going to get to go to sleep...silly me. |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Hi Serenity, I’m probably way off (when aint I?) but the first part kind of reminded me of Janet J. But more so, from a scene in a movie like Chicago. (of course since I didn’t see the movie, I’m just going by the previews, how pitiful is that lol) Either or way, I really liked it! Thanks, it was a fun read  |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Not only what icebox said...but the sensation of falling back into another time... well done, serenity... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oooh I love this!!! For my own personal reasons... Must get my sister to read this. A keeper for sentimental reasons. Hugs sweet lady~ ~ I like not only to be loved, |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I have a painting that perfectly fits this poem. If I didn't like it so much, I'd give it to ya...lol.  |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
serenity Wonderful color to character, with a flair of the poet! |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Aww Karen, my sister messaged me to come read this, and I am so glad that she did. I am keeping this bright jewel of a write for special reasons. Thankyou so much for your amazing talent. hugs, Chris "At one glance |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
An excellent write! Grover. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
She knew a place to hide beneath the bare of skin! If you know her (for real), write about this one k? I have to know this character more  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I wanna know more too! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
A blush and a thank you--and yes, Mysteria, I've got this new character knocking around my head here. Nance and Chris? ya'll know I have to know the "special reasons" now. (You two can tell some terrific stories.) And yep, this lady doesn't have a name yet--but she's another post-it note on my desk. (I'm a mess over here.) Thanks and love to all. The poetry was just nagging at me again so I thought I'd let it out. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Well I, for one, am very glad that you 'let it out'...smile "shivering the crawl of fringe teasing tiny hairs of thigh with more than her fair share of sass-- "c'mon daddy-o let's fly" She knew a secret place to hide-- beneath the bare of skin." Love this, Karen...especially those last two lines... Agreeing...I want to hear more about her too...smile... Love you...  "When the power of love overcomes the love of power the world will know peace." --Jimi Hendrix |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
If I were to say "perfect" . . . it would not be enough.... now, where IS that old tie pin I had... jwesley |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
This definitely left room for many colorful interpretations of the character. I'm with Noah. I pictured it as a little sad- Perhaps knowing of innocence lost, but getting on with life. I really enjoy how you use your brush, Lady. Sadelite |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
K~You can believe there is a story behind this! LOL... Love ya lady~ ~ I like not only to be loved, |
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