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EvocativeVerse2
Senior Member

since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

0 posted 2004-02-06 12:29 PM

There’ll Be Peace

The pain of you asphyxiates me.
Like a maelstrom it pulls me under,
jerks at my flesh 'til I open mouth,
and draw in a torrent of heartache.
I’m submerged in the brine of might-have-been.

Davey Jones' clasp me to thy bosom.
Here amongst shipwrecks forgotten I'll lie--
--ne'er to rise to the surface again.
Sink deeply my bow and crush my stern,
for anguish I'd have immersed forthwith.

Let the rise and fall of the ocean;
be wedded to the beat of my heart.
Let memory blend with the ebb tide,
‘til it is as vaporous as waves,
breaking on the shore. Then there’ll be peace.

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

Snow

Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain

1 posted 2004-02-06 01:01 AM

right from..

"The pain of you asphyxiates me."

i was hooked!!! what great word
useage throughout the entire piece
even had me thinking.. "ohhhhhh i wish i had said that !! "

niiiiice! i loved this one.
snow

"yet each man kills the thing he loves
by each let this be heard,
some do it with a bitter look,
some with a flattering word"
oscar wilde

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2004-02-06 04:34 AM

I could take this for myself...and I think I will

thanks for the hope

froggy
Senior Member

since 2003-06-23

Posts 1893
Michigan

3 posted 2004-02-06 01:40 PM

I'd love a little peace today.
You know me. I Love It.

:-)

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

4 posted 2004-02-06 01:42 PM

(big angel hugs) Awwwwwwww, I absolutely agree, sweet friend, peace for all, yay, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kevin, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2004-02-06 01:52 PM

Kevin~
This piece is richly embossed with your talent~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

6 posted 2004-02-06 01:54 PM

Your writing ability is beyond compare Kevin.
You continue to astound me with your writings.
Hugs~

~ I like not only to be loved,
   but to be told I am loved ~

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

7 posted 2004-02-06 03:11 PM

this is outstanding...though very sad...your way of writing is beautiful poetic form...very nice write.

Grover
Senior Member

since 2004-01-27

Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada

8 posted 2004-02-06 03:13 PM

Very good work! Grover.

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

9 posted 2004-02-06 03:18 PM

Wow -- powerful write.

Sadelite
Member Elite

since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

10 posted 2004-02-06 09:29 PM

E.V.,
   YOU KEEP GETTTING BETTER AND BETTER!
About six months ago, I remember first reading a post of yours, thinking, "This guy's got talent."  I've got to admit that in the poem I read, everything didn't make perfectly good sense to me, but I knew that you had the passion in your writing that creates good poetry.  In the last six months I have seen incredible growth (or at least growth as seen by my inexperienced eyes), in your presentation.  It is much smoother fitting together like a hand in a glove.
As a PIP friend, I'm proud of the poet you've become.  I very much enjoyed your write.
                ~Sadie~

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

11 posted 2004-02-06 09:34 PM

Let the rise and fall of the ocean;
be wedded to the beat of my heart.
Let memory blend with the ebb tide,
‘til it is as vaporous as waves,
breaking on the shore. Then there’ll be peace.

Kevin, this is an incredible write, my friend.
Do you realize what talent you do have?
Thanks for sharing it here with us.

Hugs

Ethel

Suetang
Member Ascendant

since 2001-03-07

Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia

12 posted 2004-02-07 03:57 PM

Great writing here Kevin.

Take care......Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

13 posted 2004-02-07 06:00 PM

enjoyed

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

14 posted 2004-02-08 05:10 AM

jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

15 posted 2004-02-10 02:51 PM

well am glad this got bumped up long enough for me to see it...great work....the emotions are vividly displayed in this

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