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Crow On The Pier
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Crow On The Pier |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Crow On The Pier Beak draggled open, slack, yellow crow eyes gone to red from the poison of salt. King of prairies, he’s nothing here as one gull, bolder than the rest edges closer, ventures a peck. He tries to fly but the black wings fold unwilling and he falls, tries to recover as a wave comes up to take him. Limp from shock he goes still hardly struggling even as the gulls, all business now, wheel in to feed. [This message has been edited by Ratleader (02-05-2004 12:26 AM).] |
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celestecat Junior Member
since 2004-02-02
Posts 29 |
Extremely good. How did you get the idea? Beautiful empathy with the animal. |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
I have viewed this scene, which maybe I've accepted as commonplace, until now...we do that in our day to day lives. You have a way of noticing a special moment and bringing to it a precise point. I like reading it. ~K~ p.s. I LOVE crows |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
These thing go on constantly, I am glad you were there to witness, and jotted your view of it down..harsh reality, but there is poetry in tragedy, as you so well demonstrate here..enjoyed _______ice ><> |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
King of prairies, he’s nothing here ~*~ What a line... this made the whole poem! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You've accomplished what I thought was impossible... left me aching with empathy for... a crow. *S* Even this former farmer girl feels for one outnumbered and doomed to die out of his element. Your pen paints a striking picture, my friend... You see... and remind us how many times we see similar situations. Excellent work... yes! *S* |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Oh, that's so awful. I'm nearly in tears, and what can I do? I'm not there. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed A piece of poetic reality...very well done! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I never thought I'd find myself feeling sorry for a crow.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ed~ I tho't I CAW a puddy tat~  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Ed - This is really great writing. I could see everything in detail. Beautiful writing. The King of the Prairie line was perfectly composed. |
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Michelle_loves_Mike
since 2003-12-20
Posts 1189Pennsylvania |
It always seems, when the king falls, there are plenty waiting to feed,,, Michelle I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ratleader Well done, life does feed upon life. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
In too late to answer everybody but...you are absolutely right Sy... and Michelle, I have seen that from all angles -- so very true! Lessee...Long John...that's three truths in a row -- that line was the reason for this poem...the first one I wrote, and the center of it. Ohhhh Maaarrrgggeee..... What is it they say -- He who would make a pun would pique a poet? Something like that.... And everybody, thanks for taking time to share an experience that doesn't get easier to see, with repetition. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Powerful writing...this maybe my favorite of yours. Eric |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big angel hugs) It's sad that "nature's way" has to be savage sometimes, as I love all living things and crows are just as special as any one of God's creatures! (sigh) You write of this so very well, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ed, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
RatL -- Poor crow; great write. Poor crow. |
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