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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought 
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Warmed iron, Red upon my tongue. Dizzy… With a dry cry. Falling down To feel my flesh On harder ground. I don’t mind Thoughts of dying young… Sighing, one too many times To live. But please, take me In spite of what I never was… Spare Him, God… He loves. He was a man of sorrows ...I am a girl of tears. [This message has been edited by GG (02-03-2004 03:21 AM).] |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
A dramatic outcry. Despair is felt. Where there is love, there is always hope. Love, Margherita  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Alyssa~ You ALWAYS make us feel ... thank you for doing just that~ Love you girlie~  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Alyssa, this really touched my heart.  Hugs, my friend Ethel |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Powerful and tender at once. Great write! Eric |
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McLean Member
since 2004-01-05
Posts 484state of marital bliss |
GG~ I have read this a few times. I'm drawn to the words, and they make me feel very desperately that there is some decision to be made by another. But I can't exactly prescribe a translation to it. Regardless, your word choices are very detailed, and keep me reading again and again. McLean |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
GG -- and I think you have love, as well, very much so. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Margherita, I hope that's true... thanks for your reply  Dix,  Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows ...I am a girl of tears. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Marge, all I do is write what I feel... I'm glad it goes farther then just words. Thanks for your reply Ethel, I'm glad it did, thank you...Eric, Thank you, I'm glad you think so.Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
McLean, I'll explain some... the first stanza just describes how I'm already unhealthy, the second says that it would be ok for me to die young since I am so unhealthy, and the third is just a plea to God... He's the one with the decision and I'm just asking Him to take my life instead of the life of my friend since he has such a strong love for someone. Thank you for your reply and taking the time to tell me what you thought of this, much appreciated iliana, maybe, but certainly not like him... thank you, though... Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
GG -- I just wanted to say that after reading your last reply here, it is as I suspected from reading your poem. I did not believe you were talking about someone you were in love with, rather for some reason (which I did not understand then but do now)that you were praying for someone elses life. GG, you do have love (it is within yourself), I can tell that from the grace with which you write -- even the painful ones and your words touch everyone who reads them. .....hang in there, jo |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
GG, I knew you were someone out of the ordinary when I read your first post. You share so much compassion in your writing in your own unique way. I could tell that this was a GG poem without even seeing your name attached! Keep up the writing, and take care. You're very good, you know? ~Sadie~ |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big angel hugs) Oh Alyssa, my heart goes out to you and this friend and his family, sweet friend, your heart beams with such compassion and love that is bringing him much comfort and peace, God Bless You and know we are all praying for him too, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Alyssa, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
jo, you really are precious. Thank you for your thoughts and cares. And yes, its not someone I'm in love with, but rather someone I love as family. A young man dying too soon. And the peak and depth of my love could never reach the distance of his. I just wish I could take his place... Again, thank you for your kind reply. Sadie, I wonder if that's a good or a bad thing lol. I'm not sure the words I express are really that of a poet, and certainly not of a good one if they are. But they are that of a heart and so I say them, pen them, cathartically tear them from myself in hopes that somehow it might ease the sting. And it does some, after extracting roots deep embedded in my mind and heart, bleeding them through me... it's just nice  thanks so much for your reply.I must be depressed today lol I'm terribly longwinded and probably am making little sense. Thanks for reading anyway. Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows ...I am a girl of tears. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Noah, Of all the things people can do, and say, and even mean... to pray is of the most value to me right now. Because only God can fix this. So thank you so much, you're always so kind. Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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