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Snow

Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain

0 posted 2004-02-02 08:28 PM

coasting

have i not crossed the path
of "him"
or
have i
coasted on through his life in a
rumble tumble tip me over knock
me down and out kinda way that
i never stopped rolling long enough
to know
he stood there
mouth agape eyes wide and heart
.... well, does a man really have
one
and here i am, handing over my ticket
waiting for another stamp on the
hand looking back at a line that rounds
the corner of not so magic mountain
on a roller coaster ride through
the minds of others
gathering the pain i need to
force me up and over another
curve
bringing me
into the folds of his thoughts
so i can
raise my hands into the air
and let go
long enough
to
fall

snow'03

"...why does my skeleton pursue me
if my soul has fallen away?"
~p.neruda

Grover
Senior Member

since 2004-01-27

Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada

1 posted 2004-02-02 08:58 PM

An excellent poem in every way. Grover.

Snow

Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain

2 posted 2004-02-02 08:59 PM

you're too sweet, grover.
*smiles*
thank you.

snow

"...why does my skeleton pursue me
if my soul has fallen away?"
~p.neruda

Sadelite
Member Elite

since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

3 posted 2004-02-02 09:06 PM

snow,
  so many deep thoughts expressed in a unique way... I especially was caught in thought about the roller coaster.
Enjoyed reading your work-it lent itself for
a lot of thought.  Thanks for posting.
    ~Sadelite~

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

4 posted 2004-02-02 10:00 PM

wow...superb...so deep and yet so plainly clear...the ride your words convey are well worth the price of any admission...thank you for sharing this gem

EvocativeVerse2
Senior Member

since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

5 posted 2004-02-02 10:01 PM

Snow...lately I stop in every chance I get to read your stuff. Wonderful! I wish I had half your talent. I love the way you write. You have a great gift there. Bravo!

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