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Refusing to Swallow
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Refusing to Swallow |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion 
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She refused to swallow the lines he gave, So he gave back to her all she'd paid For the anguish he'd given to her heart, For the dreams he'd denied her from the start. When the news of her refusal came to fore There were some who thought quite a bit more, Perhaps because their minds were not pure They immediately sought to invoke censure. "Refusing to swallow" is a time-worn phrase For refusing to believe what another portrays. However, some people think all expressions mean sex, And the rest of us are saddled with these hypocrites. |
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Youngatheart Member
since 2003-12-30
Posts 333 |
I do have to admit, the title made me quite curious...and so I came to read. What a pleasant surprise when I did. Youngster [This message has been edited by Youngatheart (02-02-2004 04:52 AM).] |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Very good point and good verse!  ....jo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you know how cool you are  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Ah...this does indeed beg the question of what is inferred and what is implied. I did find that your usually tight meter was confounded by the last two lines, and I was confused as to who is the mysterious "she"-- so unlike you, LJ. But I am indeed foggy these days. Sobriety tends to work my nerves and being nervous threatens my sobriety, so if you might, would you clear up my confusion? Otherwise I like the presentation of the inference vs. implication arguement, even if I am confused as to the direction. |
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Michelle_loves_Mike
since 2003-12-20
Posts 1189Pennsylvania |
Very true,,,I must say, tho, that the line I'm more familiar with is "hard to swallow", point well made, good work Michelle I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
It happens to all And makes one sigh Sometimes we won't swallow Our simple pride |
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Kie Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 77USA |
A well constructed poem. Filled with wisdom. Gives me something to ponder. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
innuendo, sailor man  |
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McLean Member
since 2004-01-05
Posts 484state of marital bliss |
wise lesson for all, my friend! McLean |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
An understanding that doesn't usually reach a man's ken... but of course... then there's you. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
She refused to swallow the lines he gave, So he gave back to her all she'd paid For the anguish he'd given to her heart, For the dreams he'd denied her from the start. Is there ever really full recompense? *S* Excellent write, my friend!! |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
ah tis been quite some time since I read your pen, very nice verse...good to read you |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LongJohn~ This bites in just the right places~  Keeping this, I am~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very well said sir. Hugs~ ~ I like not only to be loved, |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
yup, yup, and yup *s I agree M |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Quite a message. Well done, Sir. |
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