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I Wish I’d run The Night We Met
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I Wish I’d run The Night We Met |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279
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I Wish I’d run The Night We Met I gave to you a golden thing, A token called a wedding ring, And pledged a vow to love renewed, Because I thought your heart I’d wooed. How ill considered was my plan, I could have been a ladies man, Now all I own belongs to you, To happiness I’ve said adieu. My weekends are an irksome bore, I know not laughter anymore, You’ve changed the man that I once was, All for the glory of, “Because!” I use to ride upon my bike, And fish rivers for bass and pike, I feel naught in my heart these days, Our conversation is but clichés. I wish I’d run the night we met, For then I’d know not this regret. Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Don't we give ourselves the hardest tests? Lots of truth here...but hindsight...is always something we can learn from as we go into the future. |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
A sad poem. Very good write! Grover. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Late in his life, Henry II said, "I could have conquered all the world...if not for women." Take it one day at a time. Good luck! |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big angel hugs) This is so very heartfelt, sweet friend, matrimony truly is something that should be taken seriously and examined closely, as a vow is a vow, then again, who knows, some women like to have fun in those ways! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kevin, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you But if the bright lights don't receive you You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20 |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Bittersweet write Kevin.. But, oh so well done! Hugs~ ~ Is that love I see in your eyes... |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
 Well done, good writing. |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
EV, Bitter-sweet... I wonder if what you write of isn't something that everyone feels if not but just a second. You have captured it well in words, my friend. Take care. ~Sadelite~ |
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McLean Member
since 2004-01-05
Posts 484state of marital bliss |
Who you once were, eh? This speaks of such a sad experience. Having gone through this type of ache before (similar, but very different, I'm sure), I wrote this long ago (thought you could relate): The wedding ring you gave to me So many moons ago Is broken now, as is the vow Leaves nothing left to follow To mend the heart is so obscure As is to fix a dream But moving on and being strong~ Not easy as it seems This substance you have left with me Poisons my aching core My hate for you is still brand new Killing love that was before Your poems beginning just reminded me of the birth of this one. I hope you are not the one inspiring your work, and if you are...I wish you much peace during this time of excavation. McLean |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kevin It's a very difficult thing...to make a relationship work forever. You have written the heartbreak well. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sad stuff Kev, but better now than later ey? |
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Kie Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 77USA |
Your poem has the perfect blend and flow. Very sad and it pulled at my heart strings. May you find happiness again. |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Sad but written beautifully. Hugs to you from me. |
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Michelle_loves_Mike
since 2003-12-20
Posts 1189Pennsylvania |
ouch This is why I give my Mikey the freedom of card nights with the boys,,lol Michelle I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike |
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Tais Member
since 2004-01-28
Posts 92Ontario, Canada |
EvocativeVerse2, your words express a sadness within. Conversation is the best medicine for two people in a relationship. It takes much tolerance and understanding from both, to be able to listen. You poem tells us that you know how to express yourself in words, use that talent in the communication with your wife. But she needs to be willing to listen. I hope all is worked out fine for the both of you. Your poem was very well expressed. Tais  |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
I'll take a different route and presume that this poem is through the voice of a persona rather than its author, in which case, I thought this was humorous in a dark and cynical way. Although it's not remotely funny as a reality, as a "black humor" kind of write, it most certainly illicits a smirk. -MVS You CAN make a difference: |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Hey all thanks for reading this little rhyme...and Mark...you guessed correctly. This is just dark humor. All is well with my wife and I. We are very much still devoted to one another and always will be. This is just a poem from the author's demented mind. Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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