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Open Poetry #31

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Ada'doLisdo'ti
Member

since 2002-12-10

Posts 123
California

0 posted 2004-01-30 04:15 PM

I found her lying in her room
Her face pale, ghostly white as the moon
Her soul dripping onto the floor
I gently approached to hold her once more

She said "They took my love away,
I have no more reasons to stay.
In this life full of hate,
I found happiness a bit to late.

A tear drop rolled down her cheek
I tried but I could not speak
Death silenced words of comfort from me
As I watched her drift to eternity

I said "They took her love away,
she has no more reasons to stay.
In this life so full of hate,
I pray for her it's late.

The sirens rang close in my ear,
People came with words I couldn't hear.
They took her away from me,
But she already passed to eternity.

Now the tears roll down my face
A beauty that life can n'er replace
I truly don't understand
How we now walk hand n' hand

Days ago they took me away
I had so many reasons to stay
But with her now beside me
We happly walk off to eternity

Michelle_loves_Mike

Senior Member

since 2003-12-20

Posts 1189
Pennsylvania

1 posted 2004-01-30 06:40 PM

So sad and sweet
Michelle

I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike

jaicie114
Senior Member

since 2003-09-27

Posts 750
On the edge of forever

2 posted 2004-01-30 06:53 PM

My goodness, Ada...what an intense write. Thank you for sharing such deep emotions with us.

Love & Light...jc

This I know as Truth...we are all Beings of Light.

Amara
Member

since 2003-02-23

Posts 158
East of the moon, west of the sun.

3 posted 2004-01-30 08:04 PM

"I pray for her it's late." (Er...is it missing something? I doesnt quite make sense. Punctuation, or something?)

Other than that, deeply moving, absolutely stunning. I love the repeated stanza...well, repeated with variations...and the last stanza, it's absolutely amazing. A+

Light keep you always,
Amara

It's not only cowardly to run...

...it's futile.

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