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Old Worlds and Walls |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~*~ In a pensive state of mind, the candle light snuffed out in the dark. Lacking the luster and dreamless flames, boarders between old worlds and walls. Hung haphazardly without a tangible thought, like mine, his eyes blur unaware the room reeks of stale whiskey. The silence bares a cross willing time to ease and erase. Pouring two fingers full isn't enough to make peace. My head weighs heavy, like dead weight in my arms dropping anchor, securing the nightmare I dread. ~*~ |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
A very dreamy write. Enjoyed!  |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
This one is deceptively dreamy, with an edge of darkness coming way too close. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Grover~ It's more dark than dreamy today, but I thank you just the same. Thank you Nan~ Variety comes in all forms, eh? |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
This causes me to ask many questions. What could have caused such weight and the reeking of stale whiskey. You've painted a stark picture here, one that shows so much in so few words. "The silence bares a cross..." I always end up leaning back in my chair after reading your poems, just taking time to collect my thoughts. They are stirring. Sadie |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I don't much care to admit it, but it's where I live, hence, the reason I don't let on. Thank you for reading, now sit up straight, and not to worry, I'm a big girl! Hugs for you Sadie girl~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very dark write....hope you are okay girl |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
Wow.. I loved the layout of this one. The dreamy structure lined with a darker tone. Well written!  ^*-Kimberley-*^ "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Lori- This is the reason I return to this place time and time again, no matter how busy I am...WONDERFUL! I've missed your writing and you. Take care. Love ya, Amy "When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter" |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
living life on the edge, and yet, finding purpose and happiness in all things tremendous write |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"My head weighs heavy, like dead weight in my arms dropping anchor, securing the nightmare I dread." ~ Your pretty head deserves to feel buoyantly happy and filled with joyous thoughts and dreams! ...swish, swish, with my magic wand! ~ and thus it shall be!   Linda |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
on the edge of darkness, it pulls and leave one wondering what might happen if touched....I too, was stirred by this...as always Lori you have such a truth about you....hugssss girlie....  ~~**~~ The sound of silence calls, I hear your voice and suddenly I'm falling, lost in a dream The echo of our souls meet ~~**~~ |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
you are walking that edge here cool stuff, lands like a thud of sobering reality to situaions many have to live with nice work girlie |
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