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Palms Touching Water
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Palms Touching Water |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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{so that I may remember each day since our meeting} ~ Holding in my mind the bare abandoned images of you again tender of earth broken once-- with rare gifts now burnt ash here I will fall in yesterdays dust slipping silently across night for more peace -- I inhale stone by stone, grain by grain-- speak to me of memories and love of children how happiness should be a four letter word wrapped in silk one letter bordering the other with smoke shadows between what we meant to say reduce the dance to darkness so that in your hands tonight as our palms touch water I will finally see your paintings reminding me the only distance between dust and ash is the echo ~~**~~ Walking with bare feet among a tapestry of words, each woven thread, awakening the soul ~~**~~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Some truly profound thoughts so powerfully expressed. Communication seems a great challenge most of the time! PS What a infinitely charming girl you are! Love this new photo. It sparkles. Love, Margherita  |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Very well written. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
... and this piece will echo in my mind for quite a while. 1derfully written! |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"one letter bordering the other with smoke shadows between what we meant to say reduce the dance to darkness so that in your hands tonight as our palms touch water I will finally see your paintings reminding me the only distance between dust and ash is the echo" I'm not sure why but this reminded me of hearing a train whistle in the night...a lonely, lonely sound. Excellent write Lauren...  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"so that in your hands tonight as our palms touch water I will finally see your paintings reminding me the only distance between dust and ash is the echo" Wow....beautiful Lauren. Love ya pretty lady~ ~Before befriending butterflies |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh, I knew this would be good just by the title! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lauren I know I've told you how lovely you are...I say it again. This is an expression of that.  |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
As I have said before....only as our Lauren can write it! Awesome. Chris  Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Lauren~ Your poetry is a fragile beauty. You draw the lines so fine, exquisitely. Holding in my mind the bare abandoned images of you again tender Love that! ~hugs you~ |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
how happiness should be a four letter word wrapped in silk lovely Lauren...I find a peacefulness in your words hugs Maureen |
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IndigoEve Member
since 2003-01-10
Posts 279Etched in the illusion of time |
Oh God, how beautiful! You've always been a part of my muse; thank you for letting me remember how I used to write. Slowly, I can reclaim my words.. as our palms touch water I will finally see your paintings If I were to touch you, would you bleed a velvet river, running miracles through the sodden ground? --Moi |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
So nice to read you again. Just a great read here...Emotive. |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
bernie A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
one letter bordering the other with smoke shadows between what we meant to say reduce the dance to darkness so that in your hands tonight as our palms touch water I will finally see your paintings reminding me the only distance between dust and ash is the echo =========================== oh how I love when you haunt me butterfly-lovely with your words.... this one has an incantation of exquisite in its imagery and intend. Beautiful expressions L-girlie.  Home is a feeling I buried in you ... I'm alright, I'm alright ... It only hurts when I breathe ... M.E. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(bowing)... to the master at touching with words.. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
love to all and thank you for such beautiful replies....hugsssss ~~**~~ |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Lauren: **sighs** no one writes quite like you do my sweet friend...as always this is beyond words! Beautiful, poignant, and very moving to say the least. I've missed you. Take care Love ya, Amy "When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter" |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"how happiness should be a four letter word wrapped in silk" ~ How do you keep coming up with such creative and memorable lines?!?  Linda |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Truly a beautiful write. The title beckoned me...and the echo left a tear. TD |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Echoes........ memories do that. Repeat in the mind. hmm.... Juju |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
*long slow sigh* am speechless at how beautiful this is.......*starts the applause* |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Lauren, I know that I've told you before, but I will again......your breatakingly beautiful writing amazes me, my friend.  Hugs, Ethel |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
No only did I feel the reverb of that echo tonight, I am sure I will feel it again. Lady, this was a true keeper! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Lovely...James |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Profound beauty! ......jo |
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