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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space 
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there are colder things than ice and snow, a heart that beats indifferent it threatens to subdue and in my weakness, a desperate want to succumb to loosen the hold and sink into the depths again |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
good evening, my night owl friend... yes, indeed, much colder |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Ahhh Bello...Amazing m'friend. I'm keeping it  Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
You're writing is warm however as it melted my heart a little! There is such emotion in this poem. You tell tales from the heart. Well done! ^*-Kimberley-*^  "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
There certainly are colder things and this is a good concise description. Eric Ain't doin nothin at all |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
short and to the point then the descent into self again yes iknow |
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zippi Member
since 2004-03-31
Posts 56California |
Precisely, concisely written. My pleasure indeed! Rene` |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Very nice! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
and in my weakness, a desperate want to succumb to loosen the hold and sink into the depths ~*~ I know this wretchedness... |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Well done Raph. Good to read your work again. Chris Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale. |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Way to go. Great write! Keep them coming. JL |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
a heart that beats indifferent...definitely colder than ice or snow... nice to see you back, Raph. M |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Raph, a heart that beats indifferent ....to loosen the hold and sink into the depths again argh, those last lines made my stomach sink...i know a man who makes me feel this way. ha ha. hm, his title begins with D and ends in d. can you guess? There's nothing worse than this. As i read this I envisioned something you told me the other day, so it was doubly effective! is doubly a word? hugs. chin up. |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
You always have been amazing.. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
First, do not think for a minute that I didn't notice your return!!!!!!   oh happy day!!!Second, "there are colder things than ice and snow, a heart that beats indifferent" Literally made my heart skip a beat with understanding... Very, very cool. Welcome home! "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks all, i actually forgot i'd posted. sleep..need...sleep... |
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